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long time crush until now

I may not know at all,
What your feelings,
But I know you’re in love with my best friend,
But my best friend don’t even like you,
So all you need is move on and back off,
And I don’t know if you like me or not,
I just wanted to hear a single voice,

My day is complete,
When you’re here with me,
I just want to express my feelings,
By writing a poem,
To tell a message of someone I whom and love,
Coz I think you don’t even know my feelings for you,

I kept my love for you,
In a very long time since 7 grade,
And my love for you will never fade,
As it is getting stronger now,

My feelings for you is like a drug,
That I am getting crazy,
I am getting sweating when you look me into my eyes,
My heart is beating fast,
My knees shake,
My body is like an ice,
So nervous that my body vibrates,
And most of all,
I kept on smiling at you,
And that feelings for you is oh so true,
And I am waiting for you to come with me,
And be my BF forever,




Author notes

yah..
my long time crush and i really like him but he does not know my feelings for him...

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  • Kunoichi
    June 29
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    So good, and thanks for entering.


  • Abstract Image
    May 11

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    Aww so sad but so beautiful. I'm sorry he doesn't know how you feel and strangely my love happened over the internet and that's how i ended up dating a guy that's 5 years older then me. I love him so much...GL


  • RainbowEyes
    April 26

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    Wonderful job on this write. The emotions are very well portryaed, and your love for thi sperson is obvious. Good luck with this love, and the best of luck in the contest.


  • theVIP
    April 25
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    like it


  • hidingintheshadows9
    April 24
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    This was a great write keep up the great work


  • BonnieQ silver member
    March 21

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    Good Expression of Emotion

    I take it, Ayla, that English might be your second language; for there is a strong halting flow in this piece as well as grammatical flaws. It has a lot of potential; so, the one thing I usually recommend as an editor, is to do a first edit by reading the poem aloud. In this way, you are more apt to catch most errors by what you hear.

    Best wishes in the contest.

    Luv & hugs, BonnieQ


  • Still Standing gold member
    March 19

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    Very expressive

    I can tell that this was coming from a deep place inside of you just the way it was written, it was written with a sense of urgency and sometimes some tension, but you have no problem expressing yourself and I think this will help get you through to the next level of your craft! Good job!


  • Angelo di Luce gold member
    March 19

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    falling in love in Spring time, Lovely, there is magic about
    Apart from one or two spelling typos, nice ly done
    Thank you

  • bleeeeee
    March 19
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    hi!!!!

    i hate crush


  • estbelle gold member
    March 19

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    I had experience this once as well when someone you really like is head over heels to your best friend...sigh


    • emoempess
      March 19
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      thanks for the comment

      yah..!!he is in love with my best friend.... he dont not know that i have a crush on him

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