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The Ink

I dip and I release the ink
The thoughts in which I think I think
And when there is none left to pour
I値l leave this world forevermore

I study and I watch the ink
The moment that I dare not blink
And when I find this as a bore
I値l leave this world forevermore

I slip and fall into the ink
The ocean in which I will sink
And when I知 drowning in the lore
I値l leave this world forevermore

I spin and trace around the ink
The letters that are on the brink
And when I知 trying to end the war
I値l leave this world forevermore

I knock over and spill the ink
The soul in which you wouldn稚 link
And when my ancient heart is sore
I値l leave this world forevermore

I weep and wipe away the ink
The blood in which you wish I drink
And when I知 broken in the core
I値l leave this world forevermore

I write with the last drop of ink
The words that seem to shrivel and shrink
And when I知 wondering what life is for
I値l leave this world forevermore

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AP name... RealitysAStory

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  • Little-Buster gold member
    May 12
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    Great write.
    very dark
    Best of luck in the contest.

    -Buster

  • the evil angel
    May 9

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    Hmm... very good poem, but what form is it? Please tell me because that would help me judge whether or not I want to go into... whatever it is. But it's a very good poem in general. Good job.


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    April 22
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    16.6/25

    Nicely done, but it was too reminiscent of Poe for my taste.


  • SpeakLove93
    April 16

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    Wonderful

    Although this piece is dark it is a very great write. Your imagery and metaphores work so nicely and the flow makes it nice to read. The repeating of the last line also works very nicely. Great job and thank you for entering!


  • Umi Juvariel
    April 9

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    This made me think of a poet dying. I am still deciding whether or not that is what is happening here. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.


  • Desdmona
    April 1

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    Due to the requirements of this contest, I have to remove your poem because it is not a gold trophy winning poem. I'm sorry because this was a great poem. Keep up the good work. ~Des


  • tuesdae
    March 30
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    you need to put what prompt you used, please.
    otherwise a great poem, btw.


  • stella187
    March 26
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    Another brilliant one.

    Jenny


  • alligirl707
    March 24
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    again, this is really good!!

  • alligirl707
    March 24
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    omyyygooodd!!!!! this is really good!!!

  • patrick20traveler
    March 19

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    This reminds me of Poe with the repeating refrain, "I'll leave this world forevermore." I hope you don't leave soon because I enjoy reading your poems. I really like this one.


  • firevixen7
    March 19

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    Wow this was very well done. When you wrote 'I slipped into the ink' i'm thinking the person was killing himself.. And everything started to fade into the dark and towards the end the person finally died. This is very powerful.

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