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Misery

I’ve lain for hours with this gun on my chest,
But soon all my worries will be laid to rest.
I’ve pondered for ages, my last act of life,
And find the thought calming to be rid of this strife.

It’s a pity most sad, when we search for true meaning,
And all to be found is gold and silver agleaming.
But to live in the real world as we all must do,
Is to find nothing but greed and poverty too.

The days are now long, and they grow longer still,
The hours and minutes get harder to fill.
The years of my youth have long ago lapsed,
Now there’s only one thing which must come to pass.

I’ve played by the rules, and tried to stay true,
But it wasn’t enough, and my time is now through.
The thieves and robbers that I always have scorned,
Are now arrogant, wealthy, and richly adorned.

It’s always been true, but I just didn’t see,
How the powerful manipulate both you and me.
Try though we may, to wager a fight,
We only succumb to the wealthy man’s might.

When I was young, and the world so exciting,
I never guessed then, these words I’d be writing.
But as years have gone by, my vision has blurred,
For I’ve seen all the hardships that man has endured.

To think of tomorrow, now wearies my soul,
Though young you may call me, I feel very old.
It isn’t hard times that have stolen my youth,
But great things I was told, run afoul of the truth.

The things in a man that once were admired,
Are now seen as weakness, and long since retired.
Honesty and integrity are now things of the past,
And have long been replaced by avarice and graft.

The cold steel of the gun caresses my cheek,
At long last there are no words left to speak.
All the words and phrases I spoke in the past,
Like all things mortal, can no longer last.

I don’t believe in a god, but you do I trust,
And I know this world will be turned soon to dust,
I won’t look for a heaven, and hope that hell I won’t find,
But maybe, just maybe, I’ll find peace of mind.



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  • stella187
    August 16

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    A really good poem. I really like this and I understand all of it. Very well penned.

    I know the feeling. I wonder should you have put but who do I trust?

    Jenny


  • XxNinjaNemoxX
    August 15

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    Woooow.
    This is so deep, so sad
    It touched my heart
    I love it
    Thanks for entering and best of luck
    xoxo.


  • The Accidental Poet
    August 7
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    GOLD!!!

    So I'm a little egotistical, but this is one of my most labor intensive pieces.


  • Not-The-Sun silver member
    August 6

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    wow this is very sad it sort of reminds me of my grandpa when he talks about all the experiences he's had in his life, and how things have changed over the years. Maybe things didn't really change, though. Maybe the gold and silver agleaming only outlined the American dream; maybe rules were made because we knew we could break them; people have always saught power and riches. Maybe we think things have changed, but it's more of a disappointment that a dreamy perfect world hasn't been met.

    I really enjoyed reading this piece. The last stanza was really sad and the rest of the poem really made me think good luck in the contests!


  • TwiztidMaggot
    August 5

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    wow. this is a very good piece. Very personal. YOu did an amazing job writing your emotions out! Thanks for sharing, keep up your great work! I wish you the best of luck!

    Twiztidmaggot


  • The Hardest Goodbye
    July 30

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    Judge here.

    Hey. Thank you for entering this poem in my contest, it is very much appreciated.

    This was a stunning piece of work, I loved the fact that it all rhymed. My favorite part was when you said " I’ve lain for hours with this gun on my chest,
    But soon all my worries will be laid to rest.
    I’ve pondered for ages, my last act of life,
    And find the thought calming to be rid of this strife. "

    Good luck in my contest !


  • ixvomitxsunshine
    June 17
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    *sigh*
    put your prompt in the AN.
    you have until the end of the week or you will be DQed


  • perfectsunset gold member
    May 17

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    Wow, this was very captivating
    in visuals and emotion.
    So deep in your notions.

    Best of luck & thanks for entering

  • Jason-R-Britt
    March 21

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    I hope you continue to use your pen as a sword instead of a firearm. This poem is very profound for the time we live in, and I know that this rings true in the hearts of many people today. I hope we come to see that we have been setting up a prison for ourselves, and slaving ourselves out to empower others who feed on good intentions. I pray that one day we can overcome the illusion of money, and get back to honest trade, and honest work. The future doesn't look bright while lost in a cave. A+ on this poem, especially if it is only the second poem you have ever written.


  • Simone Brooklyn
    March 20

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    This is incredibly good. Did you say this was your second poem? Wow. You are naturally talented. And I am not just saying that. The flow and the rhyme in this is almost perfect, as is the meter. Great job.


  • rufina caraid gold member
    March 20

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    How on earth did I miss this one? The theme of this poem is desperately sad but yet holds a strong truth which cannot be denied. It's true how, when young we see the world through those rose-coloured glasses which soon become tainted with real life as we age and learn, experience life, love and loss. Exceptional poem.

    Von 

  • forsomeoddreason
    March 20
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    I am so glad that you commented on my poetry, I am truly blown away by yours!


  • Oh.My.Juliet
    March 20
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    This is fantastic. I too am speechless lol

  • IamThe13thRaven
    March 19
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    Thats really deep, leaves me speachless...


  • the wrong joke
    March 18

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    wow

    this is amazing, i didn't see nething wrong with it. I love the last half of it. it's beautiful, keep being amazing.

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