The starving heart
pounds hunger through veins,
fever on the brow.
Eyes constrict with pain.
Need is torture,
which consumes one in its throes.
How does a slave to such,
How do I, a slave to such,
endure?
Manna rains.
Seeds of sustenance
drip pure.
Poor starving heart -
sustained by worship of the god,
the hard and throbbing truth,
the propagating rod.
And O! the drink is sweet
nourishment bestowed
in grave and desperate rhythm of surfeit.
Author notes
NOT a pre-write, but i deleted it from the contest by mistake, and had to choose pre-write to re-include it. 
A contest entry
- ~ Exile ~ by Stuart Higginson.
1400 points, ended June 23, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I enjoyed this one. However, I felt there was a lack of the spirit of the age ... any sense that this was a poem about an ending love and one's journey from that back to single life, in this modern age. A distinct lack of relationship matter ... moments you were haunted by as time went by after the relationship ended ... why the relationship ended ... what happened to you (how did you contend when life changed ... when lifestyles changed ... et al). I liked the concept of a "starving heart" though, though the poem itself tells me so little, which is a shame. The lack of actual detail/matter did leave this less of a personal journey shared with the reader, than I'd hoped it to offer. Of course I am not criticising the poem as a poem in its own right, merely as an entry in this contest. I enjoyed reading nonetheless, and thank you for entering this.
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Thanks for this entry. Now I have a new computer and can access the net properly, I am bringing this contest to a close this week. Judging will be finished by Sunday. I am just popping by to paste this to Word, as I am monitoring my online time presently, due to being over my internet dongle allowance. A critique will be issued in the next 2 days. Many thanks for your patience.
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I like this poem.
The pain and hunger of the soul journeying through life, "Sustained by worship of the god"
Very well done.
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