The camera flashes had come and gone
The woman in the azure dress
Shows signs of fatigue
As her billowing train falls
Down the side of the railing
Tugging her too thin, model-like body
The weight of the fabric too much
Pulling her almost over
But she clings to the railing
Breathing and regaining her poise
Wishing she had eaten lunch
A flashbulb blinds her with light
"Perfect shot" the photographer remarks
Author notes
I hope you like the take on this prompt.
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Good job on this piece.
Strong imagery and emotion here. I like the irony.
Bravo!!!
♥ Kate -
nice..
i like the imagery in this piece ...reminds me of a newspaper picture taken by surprise in an awkward moment!
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Very Good Piece Of Poetry Daniella
Yes I could tweek it a bit - but it is great the way it is - the message is bang on - what is beauty ? - inner beauty is precious - I have a poem "September Eleventh" you may read and reply - you being L.D.S may set me straight on your reply - Bless God - Joe ---------------------------- cheers
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Thanks for the read
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Hah. She's almost fainting from hunger and they think that's perfect. Wonderful irony.
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I thought so too
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Nice. What's with the believe that thin is beautiful?
This poem is similar to one of my writes from years ago. That i'm know inspired to find & continue.
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Lol well this actually is me mocking models just a bit... and an ex friend... she wants to be a model.
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