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Dancing In The Rain

Moving gently down the street

To the rhythm feel the beat

The pitter patter of the rain

The screaming from my inner pain

Life was never perfect from the start

But you were supposed to protect my heart

Instead you beat me down

A helpless body on the ground

The torment never seems to stop

Then finally my last tear drops

Standing up on shaky legs and moving past the sorrow

I head out the door looking for a better tomorrow

Grieving for what cannot be

That perfect picture of you and me

Moving gently down the street

To the rhythm of the beat

The pitter patter of the rain

No longer do I hear the screaming from my pain

The sun comes out and clears the sky

The rainbow gently says goodbye

The time has come for me to grow

I have learned to let it go


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  • Forever Hated
    November 8

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    this is beautifully written! I love the way you worked the begining and the end into a progression of one. Excellence through and through Veronica =D


  • emma...
    August 28
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    wow. very powerful emotion. nice write :]


  • Tadd
    June 2
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    fantastic

  • Great stuff!!!

    Flowing narrative with an intriguing rhyme scheme that makes for a compelling read & enthrals throughout...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!


  • Rya
    April 15

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    this is awesome!!!!! I have felt these exact feelings before...it flowed so nicely and sounded so right...great write...and thanks for you're kind words...knowing i'm strong enough and hearing i am are two different things!


  • Tadd
    March 20
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    fantastic write


  • Momma Goose
    March 18
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    very nice...

    great flow, and great rhyme. I think you did a fantastic job on this.

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