I'm drawing a blank-
Emotions which are normally ever so willing to be transcribed onto paper stay bunked up inside.
When pressed for answers they retreat, leaving behind a small, simple word.
Four letters are not enough to describe this... this high, this kiss, this bliss, this love.
I feel as if I could fill a thousand pages and not even near the depths of this state.
These words are running in circles and saying nothing at all.
These words are all I have to present in hope of showing you how much I care.
The future is bright with our optimistic love as we struggle through this bleak present, both wishing to leave the life's we lead before behind, may our only memories be those we share together and our only pains be those we can overcome.
Futures are bright,
although the present is bleak,
these are the words I cant manage to speak,
forever and always- I'm your to keep.
Author notes
this is about as straight forward as I can get nowadays. Not meant to be fancy, just some musings.
Comments
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A good style for you
My first impression was that it could have a ltitle more punctuation. However, it does lead to the reader reading in a slower tempo, which is useful in a poem of this style.
It's nice to see you try to direct approach and the lack of metaphors made the meotions wihtin even more powerful.
Also, you've made a small typo, missing out the "s" on yours on the last line.
Good job
~Rose.
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