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Today is your day,
and enjoy it all you may.
For all your worries are far away,
Now come and join me in the hay.

Slide your arms around my waist,
whisper I love you's in my ear.
Our tender hearts are embraced,
Together our problems will seem clear.

I love you today,
I loved you yesterday.
In my heary you shall stay,
We'll make it through, some way.

Your my man,
Your my friend.
Hell, you watch me on the can!
and pick my ass while I bend!

So let us lay,
and sleep the day away.

And when the sun decides to appear,
Look at me and remember
I love you, dear.

How does this write make you feel emotionally, and what does it make you think? Are you left with something, or have I answered all the questions already

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  • Sonofdead
    March 22
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    Es ist ein liebensbrief. Beautiful. I love it. Thank you for sharing.