Its your fault
I want to die
Its your fault
I always cry
Its your fault
I started smoking
Its your fault
My heart is broken
When you decided
To say goodbye
All I wanted
Was just to die
Now my time has come
I know this is my end
Ive slit my wrist
and Death awaits
I just want
You to know
Its ALL your fault
that Im now dead
A contest entry
- Contest 2 of Suffering and Pain. Loss by MichaelSavage.
625 points, ended March 20, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Its been a while so tell me what you think? Should I change anything?
Comments
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Wow! the flow is fantastic and the ryhme really works, this is full of power and angry I lovw it
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Thank you for entering and good luck. Nice poem.
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Is is just me...or does this poem sound exactly like your other one, "Because of Her" ??
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Here's a suggestion: When you want to give the same message, but using a different poem...learn to paraphrase significantly. Also, try writing in a different style. It will make your poems more interesting, and will help you grow as a poet =]
But otherwise, I recognize the emotions that you've put into this poem-- I've felt the same many times.
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