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mirror-faced sweetheart ♥

what a beautiful tangled mess you are honey
legs in a basket on that concrete floor

those eyes you used to pride yourself on don't sparkle anymore
and alongside your cigarette stained teeth
you are the perfect portrayal of teenage downfall

you fool us all so well honey, making us forget
[it's only the attention you really crave..]
just look at those pretty parrallel line across your arms

your black lace undergarments are
twisted and stained
from the last time you went out to play
[but that's okay honey, you just want to feel alive..]

make them watch you shake your hips and stumble
as your bones jut out of time to the song bleeding in your ears
don't think of that growing bundle of cells within you
and whomever else they might belong to
just knock back that vodka and be reassured by the instant warmth
[you know it wont be a problem much longer..]

the whites of your eyes illuminated by the disco lights
drink-fuelled drama drips out of every pore
it was never going to be a quiet night was it?

don't you just love to keep them guessing honey
make your way to the stage your id whispers
[let's make them stop and stare..]

high heels abandoned in the corner
and continue your performance barefoot
.
.
.
your feet as dirty as your name.

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  • stepbystep
    April 16

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    hahaha, the last line made me smile.
    i am in love with the 'aura' of your poems. (:

    yet another amazing write. (will it ever cease?!)
    xD


  • perfectsunset gold member
    April 11

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    Title- 5/5
    Creativity- 4/5
    Use of metaphors, imagery, etc.- 10/10
    Overall package- 5/5

    Total= 24/25

    I really loved this piece. Part of
    it hits home for me, in terms
    of the club scene, dancing
    and drinking the night away
    to absolve all problems.
    You have such a creative
    way of expressing dirty pretty
    and it's easily adaptable.

    This was amazing, imagery,
    metaphor, ideas, and all

    thanks for entering


  • whiterabbit.
    April 2
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    eeep
    I love this! I love dirty pretty that isn't written L.i/k*(e) t&H(i)s# This is amazing dollface. I love all of the details and descriptions that are in here. I love the emotions that come out of this and the emotions that you feel as you're reading this.
    Amazing.
    xx