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My heart break

My dreams
where once they were pleasant beyond
all I have ever known
now they have changed.

Where once I would anticipate
even come to want to see these visions
Now I have come to hate and dispise them.

For you see
that each time I close my eyes
I see you.

Holding me
caressing me
taking me to heights of pleasures
that I never reached in my waking life.

Within my dreams
it is you and I
against the world
loving each other
as only true lovers could.

Within this world
it is me
and only me
in your arms.

Yet, when I am awake
it is my heart that  is shattered
into a million
billion pieces
for it is her
wrapped lovingly in your arms
and not me.

And I
I am here
alone
in a dark world
where no one
not even you
are wihin my arms.

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no line limit trekkergirl and this is a poem that I like so I think that option was #4.

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  • Walk-Free
    June 18

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    beautiful yet painful..

    you expressed the emotions here very well in this simple poem.

    there's a sort of subtle beauty to this.

    well done and thanks for sharing!


  • Umi Juvariel
    April 9

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    You really must move on. It sounds impossible, but if you set your mind to something else, real love will find you. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.


  • Kathraina silver member
    April 4

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    Aww this is so incredibly sad!
    Wonderful, heart-wrenching piece. I love the raw emotion here.
    Bravo!!!


    ♥ kate


  • Captain Jenny
    March 22
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    This is great. Has so much emtion in it... Thanks for entering

    ~Lae

  • arunparui
    March 19

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    Be bold and optimistic

    You are not only a woman but also a human.You are a person,whatever be your gender.Now in the first meet of your "My heart Break" I feel you want to ignore the real world but you earnestly desire to establish yourshelf here.How would it happen?I knew from your profile list that you sleep at day and work at night and you enjoy sleeping.In this poem you welcme your fresh peaceful sleep in a lonely spacecraft in the real dark space full of twinkling stars one of which would appear as rising sun at the next dawn.


    • trekkergirl
      March 19
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      hummmm don't know where you got all that from. I do work nights... as for enjoying my sleep... not really. I have nothing but trouble getting to sleep. I have insomnia. Which is normal for me. No this poem was simple about break up. Nothing to do with space or stars. But thanks for your comment. It was an enjoyable read.


  • Mistress Leala silver member
    March 18
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    Oh sweeti, this is so sad and grabs me.


  • liltulip gold member
    March 18

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    sad but lovely

    nicely written to convey emotion of the topic, thanks so much for sharing even this sad feeling here.


  • geckogirl silver member
    March 17
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    I try to live by my dreams, listening to what they say.. good luck hun


  • gigglesalot
    March 17

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    i totally feel for this one....i hate dreaming about how we use to be when im laying right next to him at night. i hate dreaming about seeing him in someone elses arms treating her the way he use to treat me. it drives me insane the things he use to do that made me fall in love with him, and he didnt contuine those things to keep me from falling out of love. i really loved this poem. thanks so much for entering


    • trekkergirl
      March 19
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      I am sorry you have had this happen to you... hopefully everything gets better soon thanks for commenting

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