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Open Eyes

I wish I was sliding.
It would be easier.
I could see everything,
but not have to dwell.
                                                                              But what if you see?
See what?
                                                                              See something good.
Then I'll try to stop.
                                                                              And if you can't?
I don't know.
                                                                              But what if you see?
See what?
                                                                              Something bad.
Then I'll look away.
                                                                              And if it's all around you?
I'll close my eyes.
                                                                              But what if you see?
See what?
                                                                              See the only thing that makes
                                                                              the good,
                                                                              the bad,
                                                                              and everything else, 
                                                                              worth walking through.

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  • defintelty keep it!!! this poem rocks son! thanks for the entrry