dipped in…
the ink of my distant dream
I painted my fantasy
`with the hushed reality
even a mere sight of him
made me knit my own world
in the reflection of my old lunacy
in his every laughter
and breathed word
I hemmed in my little chimera
`with the yarn of an unvoiced love
*sigh*
if I could own him for eternity…
Author notes
option no. 3
F a t i m a
A contest entry
- Lost love by HeartBr8ker.
415 points, ended March 24, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything by Beating.
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Aww... so romantic!
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thank you so much for your comment !! ~.~"
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"even a mere sight of him
made me knit my own world
in the reflection of my old lunacy "
Those lines just said something to me. They were amazing. The form of this piece is very good. One thing that seemed out of order was the last line, saying that you want to own him. I guess, to me, ownership has nothing to do with love. Other than that, I really liked it. Good job! -
this is a great write
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thank you !! -.-"
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Hey cute one there coming from you....best of luck!
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VERY BEAUTIFUL""
SHORT, SWEET, AND DIRECTLY TO THE LOVING POINT!! BEAUTIFUL WORDS EXPRESSED SO WELL.."GOD BLESS"..LOVE, SHIRLEY ANN SHAW...
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thank you ~.~"
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