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Dew Drops

The eye fills with dreams
of grandest castles in the air
of the fairest princess with raven hair
of adventures bold, and wealth untold
and firey jewels beyond compare...

The crystalline mirage escapes the eye
shed in truth,
accepting it only as a far away tale.

Delicate dew drops that fall-
the expression of a heart
laden in sorrow.

Tears of sorrow tend to drown,
tears of joy float us away-

Both bred in the heart.

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  • AngelBellerose gold member
    May 8

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    every phrase fell on the ear
    like a dew drop of joy
    coming from your heart
    very pretty and well done
    Hugs Angel♥


  • Truetome
    May 4

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    I am caught in reverie ~ I like how you intermix sadness in thoughts of how the tale is simply a tale. this is beautiful. Love,


  • RareFlower
    March 25

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    imaginative and thoughtful

    dewdrops.. what a bequtiful phrase.. every word you honoured tears with. such emotion and sadness. thankyou for sharing
    blessings
    RareFlower


  • Mirthryl
    March 19

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    Excellent title, "drops" being either water clumps or process of falling, and "Dew" being homophone for "do", as in, they DO fall.
    Very nice internal rhyming. Progression from fantasy to a less charming reality. Very nice "shed in truth." Excellent concluding three lines.

    • Nickelspring gold member
      March 20
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      Do fall.. Im glad you caught that! I don't think I would have..
      Thank you so much for your insightful comments
      KW~


  • darkyinsoul
    March 19

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    This is breathtaking and beautiful. Very clear picture you painted with you unique words. Good luck on the contest.


  • Nymphetemine
    March 18

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    Dear poet what a wonderful write.. Tears of sorrow tend to drown,
    tears of joy float us away....
    I love this line..Mind you I love the poem....
    Good luck in the contest.
    Love and Light AngelofLight

  • Truetome
    March 17
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    oh wishes that shed in tears...those miraculous tears that Heaven gave us. I like how you mention happy one's too. Lovely write ~ Maybe change the word 'dream' in stanza two to another word? Just a thought so it's not repetitive. and 'excapes' should be spelled 'escapes' -- Just a thought.

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