laid back complacency dominates
the majority of me
you with half-hazard ways
will be the death of me
above
what the masses think
but
you make me
drink
A contest entry
- Nighttime Quickie With Prompt Pre-loaded. by Cerulean Sunrise.
700 points, ended March 16, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewrites; short poems only. by deadcolor dreams.
900 points, ended April 6, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - You never know.... by Cyanide Dreams.
1640 points, ended May 12, 77 entries
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Comments
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91
Title: 9/10
Originality: 9/10
Emotion: 9/10
Grammar/Spelling: 9/10
Flow/Structure: 9/10
Imagery: 9/10
Overall Use of Poetic Devices: 9/10
Reaction: 9/10
Rules: 10/10
Overall: 9/10
Totaling: 91/100
I really liked this piece. It was short, to the point and held a strong message. I liked how this started and end. I wish I could have seen more of this though. I think it's an awesome concept. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
Josh
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I love this poem! This deserved the gold it got. I liked the way you had some rhyme snuck in there near the end. Very strong. Thanks for your great entry and good luck!
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I like the pattern of the rhythm in this write
So graceful at first
then
delightfully broken
up
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