in the dark of night,
I see your bloody face,
changed by fate and
haunted by broken dreams that
now down the perpetual forever
juice of your heart like it was
a shot of the burning temptation;
Satan's whiskey
another day full of bloody nightmares,
it seems that for you and I all we'll ever have
is running from this pain and it's
hot heart cancer
cause' darling we both know that there's
no escaping destiny
you try to clutch onto to something solidly real,
in the way that you've always feared the lunar light
littering into your mind and telling your heart
things you didn't want it to know,
and although you now embrace falling,
and await it's final blow, the bitterly
human part of you is still hanging on and
won't let you forget me
[ s t a y f o r e v e r ]
and even between the sepia of dreams
and your heart's darkest fog, there will always be
the cyanide kisses that bring us closer and
push us farther apart then we've ever been
and despite knowing that we won't die in the arms of angels,
we know we'll die in that of each others, no feathers
[ d i e w i t h m e ]
only the empty vial and a note written with lies
so long ago, it feels
that our hearts did stop
cause' now we're opening our eyes
to the first time ever
we're awaking finally in a place where dreams are fulfilled with
that of his final promise and we wonder if we were
wrong about heaven this whole time
even though they won't let us through the gates, we are happy
even though our hearts are bust
[ cyanide will do that to a heart ♥ ]
they still sing in hopeful anxiety of the others
never had we believed there would be a purgatory..
a heaven for fallen angels who fell, hard;
in love. ♥
Author notes
darkness: suicide
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it sucks dog ass. don't even lie.
A contest entry
- he hardly ever mentioned how beautiful his disaster became by Re-invention.
550 points, ended March 22, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lost Poems. (Poems That Have Not Been Commented) by HereComesTheSun.
700 points, ended April 25, 88 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Confessioin Competition by MaddCuppyCake.
525 points, ended May 17, 54 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what's good? ;0
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the poem help alot of emotion and the dirty pretty feel that was intertwined worked well BUT this form is not what this contest asks for so i will be DQing.
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To be honest, as I said before, I am not 100% positive on what prose is. I am sorry that it turned out to be an inconvience to you in your contest.
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i love the addticions contrasting in this piece. it helps prove ur point in my opinion. woderful write
good luck. thx for entering -
so well said..so well penned
no wonder the silver trophy graces this
a heaven for fallen angels who fell, hard;
in love
so deep from within.. i felt every word
every live
Hugs Angel♥
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WHOAAAA, I didn't even know it won silver!!
AP wasn't notifying me about comments, messages or contests for a while, so I had no idea... hahaha first time I've won a trophy. =)
Awh, thanks for reading my poems Angel, it means a lot.
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LOL go look in your back note to see you should have won points on this on
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Hmmm, I just went and checked and before the contest I was pretty AP-broke with about 130 points, and the receipt thing I found just now says I went from having 20 point to 220, ahaha either I was like flat broke and it changed it, or I spent my points and forgot I did heh I thought I had 200 + points just by commenting and stuff xD
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LOL you make me laugh you are not a dum kid ... and we all spend to much...hugs♥
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lmao ahahah you make me laugh too, and yeh ahaha I am going to cause an AP recession with all of my careless spending. xD
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Ooh, great word choice. Especially the whole stanza that ends with [ s t a y f o r e v e r], you used a lot of... l-sounds. haha. <33.
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That's some nice dog ass.
Try doing a format that makes you uncomfortable, see what you end up with. I like your analogies.
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lolololoololol dog ass.
Thanks for the comment, braah. AP isn't telling me when someone comments on my stuff anymore, no idea why. x[[
Heh, there's little that makes me uncomfortable... haikus, those piss me off. Will try one for you in the near future, Jackilicious. ;d
I don't like my analogies, they are dirty little groupies laying eggs in my brain while I sleep, awake. ;o
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you do a really great write even though long. i felt each words come at me and show the prompt so well, i loved your style and it set you apart from everyone else. great work and good luck in the contest :]
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aweee :'[, too sweet!
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