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Little Ghost

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Left me lonely to dry from tears

Tears that I'll shed for countless years

For thee I twinkled in pearly sky

yet murdered thee with no goodbye

I wonder now what did I gain

Else than nightmares, tears and endless pain

I wonder now if what I did was right

Then compared it with the pain i feel inside

What have i done sweet child of mine

Instead of protecting you i did your crime

Little ghost in me, screams in my brain

Moist my burning spirit cause am going insane

Little ghost grab my soul its yours to take

Let me give you a name and correct my mistake...

 

                     9:50PM

                 16-March-2009

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  • HonorablyFallen silver member
    June 15

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    I happen to love ghosts. Most of them anyway. I live with at least one in this old house. From the War of Northern Aggression , no doubt. Anyway the last line is beautiful

  • liveddog gold member
    May 9

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    Hi G.b.d,
    I hope this finds you well. I saw this quote in a book I am reading and I thought of you.

    "Those who know ghosts tell us that they long to be released from their ghost life and led to rest as ancestors. As ancestors they live forth in the present generation, while as ghosts they are compelled to haunt the present generation with their shadow life." (Hans Loewald)

    Cheers,
    Liveddog.

  • sunsunny3235
    May 9
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    good


  • Antebellum
    May 6

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    Left me lonely to dry from tears
    Tears that I'll shed for countless years
    For thee I twinkled in pearly sky
    yet murdered thee with no goodbye

    this is great. maybe put a peiord at the end of this and start a new stanza... it would add to it.


  • individuality gold member
    May 6

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    a good piece of poetry penned - a sigh of sorrow intermingled with shattering pain but also a serenity in between the lines i find.


  • Short but cute
    April 29

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    Wow this is wonderfull. I actually cant describe this in words that well. It took my breathe away. Very well written. It made me cry...Very good


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    April 26

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    Wow this is sad but brillently you brang it all togeather and you have a master piece. It was a pleasure to read.


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    April 19

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    Excellent

    A very fine write, indeed. You have expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us.


  • Jocelyn.Jaded
    April 17

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    This is just amazing. So much emotion and power. You really have a talent. I'm in love with this piece ^.^ "What have i done sweet child of mine
    Instead of protecting you i did your crime
    Little ghost in me, screams in my brain
    Moist my burning spirit cause am going insane
    Little ghost grab my soul its yours to take
    Let me give you a name and correct my mistake..."
    Favorite lines. Great poem!

  • liveddog gold member
    April 16
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    Hi Godless but divine,
    This the first time I have read your work and I am impressed. I love the rhythmn of your writing style. The title is intriguing for me since the content suggest that it is a Big Ghost you are dealing within yourself - a paradox just like your name or simply a contradiction? Your poem has sparked my desire to read more of your poetry. A super piece of work,
    Liveddog.


  • liltulip gold member
    April 15

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    your words and that picture

    wow! if i had to pick a favorite part i would suppose it would be this:
    I wonder now what did I gain
    Else than nightmares, tears and endless pain
    I wonder now if what I did was right
    Then compared it with the pain i feel inside
    intense emotion there, a great write!


  • Pissenlit
    March 17

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    Little ghost in me screams in my brain
    Moist my burning spirit cause am going insane
    Little ghost grab my soul its yours to take
    Let me give you a name and correct my mistake...


    ...this is my fav part


  • perryl
    March 17

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    Guilty Conscience

    A decision made once hastily
    No word, no sound, just vanished
    Mistake realized now haunts mine soul
    Thou face beseeches me in mine dreams
    Now I offer unto thee a heartfelt apology
    Please accept and allow me to rest in peace...


  • mysterious.angel
    March 17

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    i feel as if i owe so much more to this write its is so amazing and i felt so much power you have completely struck me with a power i didnt know existed


  • mysterious.angel
    March 17
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    wow

    this is amazing i felt the tug of pain amazing write.kudos


  • justapoet
    March 17

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    So much pain in this one that I had to compose myself whilst reading it. I am sad that you are suffering so, writing about your pain is a good way to exorcise your regrets. This was a wonderfully sad poem, well done Godless but divine


  • FaerieNWonderland
    March 16

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    this is an amazing write!
    it is so heartfelt and heartbreaking....
    thank you so much for sharing

    your Faerie


  • Godless But Divine gold member
    March 16
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    thank you all from the bottom of my heart...


  • ennovy silver member
    March 16

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    Excellent Emotional Write

    This write shows a man wanting to right a wrong, make it alright with his own heart that is crying out for understanding...This is deeply emotional. Vividly I see his tears and I feel the pangs of insanity reaching for his soul....another talented write from a dynamic poet........Novy

    Write On Forever!


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    March 16

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    This is so heart felt ,

    and the depth of your soul pours out!you are an amazing Poet, i have always respected your
    work.

    Blessings

    Rend


  • an.unheard.cry
    March 16

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    very nice the forgive me at the end ehh its kinda iffy
    but other than that i love this
    its emotion. its depth.
    great write
    =)

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