I want to be the one you come to
When the world is dark and you
Just want to cry; even if I cannot
Change things, holding you close
Makes it all right
I want to be the one who may
Not know it all, but who will be
The strength you need to help
You carry on
Let you lay your head on my
Chest the whole night long,
Or at least until the pain is gone
Even if we have had a fight,
I want to say "I love you"
Before we say "goodnight."
Because you are the love of my life
Author notes
In the last few days, I've come to realize That I am a "Rescuer." Someone who wants to "fix" the emotionally damaged part of someone I am with, without changing the essence of who she is.
However, in the past, this has led me, at times, to women who have not been good for me.
I'm not saying I don't want someone who has suffered through bad things; I just want someone who can look to me... Not for all the answers, but as someone who can find comfort, healing, and safety in my arms.
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i like your author note it is so important that you arent there to fix things but to lean on in hard times btw the system is irking me when u read 1 of mine i always click on return the favor it keeps bringing me back 2 poems i have already read and commented on grrr....
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Beautiful
I think I like the authors notes as much as I liked the poem. lol -
"Let you lay your head on my
Chest the whole night long,
Or at least until the pain is gone"
So simple, and sweet something everyone hopes to find.
excellent write. -
Hardship builds charactor, I get what you are saying with the type of girl you want.
This was a great poem that I greatly enjoyed.
keep writing. -
This is wonderful you have your true love like I do. Thank you for sharing and it was a pleasure to read.
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I was an Ear Too
When younger I think the desire to help anyone in any adverse circumstance is more intense. We might have helped a younger person out of "we've been there". We might have helped the peer because we are there. We might have have helped an elder person out of sympathy or out of respect for their longer life and greater knowledge.
I think your verses sum up nicely your personal author's note.
Good write.
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I love this piece it describes me to a tee. Although lately i've decided to lay off the fixing and see what happens.
Excellent expression of self.
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Awh, this is such a sweet piece. The rhyming and flow was great. Love is a wonderful thing.
I have a few suggestions: Maybe change the font color, it's hard to read. Also, I kind of feel it could be a little longer.
However, I did enjoy this very much. Thank you for sharing.
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so sweet
This made me think of my friends I call "teddy bears" - specifically Dyllan. He's one of the sweetest most amazing people ever who always jumps in and saves my day with his sweet patience.
-Even if we have had a fight,
I want to say "I love you"
Before we say "goodnight."-
that really pulled at my heart strings. every relationship should be like that. You're going to make some lucky girl really happy someday.
and I just have to say "awwww - your better than new born kittens"
lol - keep penning
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Well, you're not alone.
I have always been a magnet to anyone who needs rescuing, male, female, lover, friend; doesn't matter.
Kudos to you for recognizing this and looking to find a balance.
The poem is touching and sincere with a kind of romatic sad feel to it.
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White Knight Syndrom
I too suffered from this when I was younger, with much the same results. In my case two failed marriages. But I found a keeper. Been twenty-six years on the 29th. Keep looking she's out there waiting.
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Promise ... sing
Hovering on the borderline of prose and poetry the notes put the question of motivation - "whether 'tis nobler in the mind to assume the stings and arrows of outrageous fortune" for and on behalf of third parties than to focus upon sharing and partnership ... comfort healing and safety are not necessarily panacea especially for those who repeatedly question safety as loss of self though seeking it to avoid loneliness -
I just want someone who can look to me...
i have so been where this write is coming from. you wrote this very well and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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Lofty
Very impressive as these are
lofty goals for a man.
I felt the sincerity of your words.
A powerful and poignant write
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Sweet
This is something that really hits home for me. You are quit the guy for this poem. I love the way how you wanna know only so much. I feel the same way, everyones had there heart ace and pain so why share it with the new love of your life. You can't live in the past so why bring the past to the future. I think its better to forget sometimes. Take your heart and keep it close, don't go for it unless both your heart and mind are on the same page...
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I agree with LdyBrknWing. The ladies will be camped on your doorstep, if not you'll be stalked in cyberspace.LOL!
This is a very beautiful poem. It says everything we women want our significant other to be. Any woman you've tried to be this way with who did not appreciate you.......her loss. Just keep being you and, you'll get the one who gives back all you give to her. Again, you've written a beautiful poem that I enjoyed reading. -
Awe!, it is so beautiful, this is what love should be , but isn't always. great write, I love this. It has such a strength of caring in it. Awesome!
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this is extremely calming and romantic. it comes across as a simple bit of romance to one cared for very deeply. your speaker seems strong and capable...and oh so loving. really nice portrayal.
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Be prepared, my friend, to have the women lined up after they read this beautiful poem! There's not a woman alive who doesn't long for the very things you're looking for. You deserve the best, and I know, if you are willing to be patient, you'll know her when she comes along, and she'll be everything (and more) that your heart desires. Beautiful piece!
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i write alot like this, i always tend to write about my girlfriend and the small things that make me smile. i like this poem, it is very good and it is very organized in a readable manner
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