Mr and Mrs Bubble
they float about all day
they’re really quite transparent
and don’t have much to say.
One day they both went shopping
but before they reached the shop
they flew into a lamppost
and both of them went pop.
Author notes
Written February 28th, 2004
A contest entry
- "Poetry Search (Revised)" by YerTweetyness.
300 points, ended May 13, 2004, 27 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Is Dirty Pretty a Lost Cause? by Hell In Harmony.
6500 points, ended July 22, 2008, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Ouch that must have hurt, lol This is quite well written for a 10 year old. Did mommy help at all?
But whoever helped or didn't, thanks for the smile.
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Haha that was great.
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this made me laugh
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lol sometimes briefest poetry based on the simplest of ideas entertains us the most, or perhaps I have mind which is easily pleased. This poem made me laugh and certainly brightened up my afternoon
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I don't even know what to say to this, Ha.
It was a cute, funny poem, but not what I was looking for
thank you. Kat -
What a clever little poem. Great job!
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A muse sing
Impossible to refrain from applauding such a pithy take on T.C. MITS and family ... an enjoyable excursion ...
T.C. MITS ?
The Common Man In The Street
Enjoy !
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LOL THIS IS GREAT!!I COULD SIT AND READ POEMS BY YOU ALL DAY!this made me laugh can you write summore huh?
i want more!!
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This one is so cute!!
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haha soooooo cuuuuute! i love it
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lol, this is really cute!!! i like bubbles!!! This is a funny poem!!!! great job!!! and great job in winning first place with the contest!!! it was really good! I enjoyed reading it!
Keep Writing
Brandy*~
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Im so happy for you you deserved to come first place and well you did congratulations you should be proud of yourself to come first place out of so many entries well done im really not surprised you won! once again well done.
rowena jo -
i agree with moses.....really does blow my mind to think an 8 year old could write such a poem for it really is good. Made me laugh so much too..........being a bubble would suck big time
~Em xxxx -
fantastic
This was wonderfully charming!!! It blows my mind to think that an 8-year-old could have written this!! Fantastic job, Bogwitt.
Best wishes,
Moses -
once again great
lol once again a great piece i could sit and read poems made by you all day these are absoulutely wonderful it flows/ has a great beat. keep it up and with you being only 8 and writing this well then im sure youll have a future in writing
rowena jo -
yet another good one! your poems flow so well, theyre great!
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Excellent poem Keep them coming
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excellent poem!
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hahaha
This was bubbletastic! Good work bro
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haha. i'd hate to be a bubble.
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lol i like this poem its really funny
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