All blues, lavenders, shades of pink,
sun rising, a beautiful day,
refreshing place to sit and think.
Doe wanders down to rivers edge,
drink of water this early morn.
Skirting a ground mist covered hedge,
an Owl hoots, it's loud sound forlorn.
Watching from our camouflaged wedge,
make no sound to alarm or warn.
Shutters snapping so silently,
capturing life and a new day.
Photographer smiling in glee,
at what the camera lens can see.
Just watching now ,the doe does stay,
natures animal, wild and free.
Yet gun comes up, intent to harm,
deer for St. Paddy's was his pledge.
Well oiled bolt, not to alarm,
hard getting a shot when they've fled.
Quick echoed boom, quicker rearm,
natures child thrashes, lifeless, dead.
Only came down to get a drink,
sun rising, a beautiful day,
all blues, lavenders, shades of pink.
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I call this a Freyjan butterfly - Refrain
This form as far as I know has not been done yet.
A/B/a/c/d/c/d/c/d/e/f/e/e/f/e/d/c/d/c/d/c/a/B/A
Hetha is the creator of the Freyjan form.
Freyjan Form
8 syllables per line
13 lines total for one 'freyjan'
You may either break the 'freyjan' into two stanzas; 6 lines followed by 7 lines, or 7 lines followed by 6 lines. Optionally, you may place all the lines in one stanza, or 11 lines followed by a couplet.
The rhyme scheme is as follows:
a/b/a/c/d/c/d/c/d/e/f/e/f
no maximum limit on number of 'freyjans' per poem.
no required meter, but experimentation is allowed.
It is designed so that no matter where the emphasis and line breaks are placed within the 'freyjan' stanza, the pattern and rhyme scheme is still consistent. It allows room for versatility, while remaining true to form.
This is my first created form. I named it as such to honor Freyja. 13 is the number of Freyja, Norse Goddess of Love and Beauty.
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I wrote 3 of them in her original form, then thought to myself, self: Why dont you make this a Butterfly and use the first two lines reversed as a refrain?
She said experimentation was allowed!!! 
You could not use the refrain and just use the rhyme scheme to just be a butterfly.
Having dropped the middle two "f" lines to make the butterfly. 
In a list
A contest entry
- PICTURE CONTEST by penman.
1500 points, ended March 19, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Deja Vu by rainboots.
900 points, ended May 10, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Why would you read a poem and not leave a comment?
Comments
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This just painted a picture in my head. The imagery was well thought out and the flow was smooth. I think you ended it perfectly with a nice, calm line that made me smile. Great write and thanks for entering.
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Breathtaking imagery. I love your writes such a beautiful yet realistic take on things. Your work is truly a pleasure to read and I thank you for sharing it.
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Very well written piece. Keep up the great work and congrulations on the Honorable Mention. Well deserving. Best wishes to you.
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wonderful
Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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what a lovely scene you paint with your pen (or keyboard.) It must be nice to be so skilled with both your pen and your artists pallete
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Well lucky Freyja
and Lucky penman
both form and picture lovely
content fantastic.
nothing else to say, good luck
Passions
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You managed to drop my jaw in astonishment, is what you managed to also do.
Beautifully written and well constructed.
To butterfly the form the way you did, was your ingenuity. Gorgeous! Good luck in the contest.
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