I remember when I started school
The laurel tree - the swimming pool
The winter frosts and friends I made
The next door neighbours marmalade
Summer days with skies so blue
But why don't I remember you?
Author notes
Memory
A contest entry
- Keep It Short V by MacDad.
800 points, ended March 28, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I don't remember starting school
the laurel tree or the swimming pool
the winter frosts nor the friends I made
the next door neighbors marmalade
but I thought I would inform you
it was because I was busy with lil boy blue
I loved this poem and especially that surprise ending... I always love surprise endings and this one certainly has that. ( especially since we were
just discussing memory just a few minutes ago... whew I still remember... lol)
Hugs,
Suzi
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Nice flow... Definatey liked the ending... I like surprises... Good uck
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Dear Hugh
Thanks for your kind comment - you know how it is, remembering things from long ago but not what you had for breakfast yesterday - not that I'm suggesting your memory's going :-)
Love & Hugs XXX
Anne -
Dear Wheezy,
Though I don't participate in any way
on contest poems, I felt I had to say
how great it is to see you back on stage.
I've missed you for what seems to be an age.
So, let me just say: "Welcome back, dear fave
and add applause to what the others gave."
Good luck in this contest, love and hugs, XXX Hugh.
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delightful
short and all though the first five lines sound so sweet the last is like a surprise. i really enjoyed this!
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