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lifes can be destroyed

Deliberate acts towards the vulnerable!
Innocence denied form your racist remarks
Social life’s destroyed, now they're an out-cast
Caring just for your ego trips; you demoralise others
Racing to prejudices before even knowing the topic 
I see so many different people discriminating daily 

Money and greed can pull lives apart!

In the effort to be rich and ignore the poor- ignorant
Nasty words and opinions can really leave a dent on a soul 
Attention just for you; is that what you want?
Thoughtfulness is non-existent in some people’s lives!
Insomnia can actually drive one to be insane {can't you see} 
Obviously there’s no care on your part to be kind to me,
Not giving your colleague some kind of support

It’s so easy for your to say leave it at home
Sea of troubles outside of work; must stay alone

Inequality goes on everywhere in this world
Male chauvinistic pigs need to get a life!
Modification’s of laws and policies
Order concieved for human rights!
Reflectiveness can sometimes give some insight;
All of us must think more carefully about our actions

Logical thinking can conclude one’s soul
 
                      {it may make you feel whole}

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  • ExtinguishTheFlame
    May 14, 2009

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    Hehe...sorry, I liked the Male chauvinistic pigs part...it made me giggle...But a in-your-face poem, who doesn't love that?


  • Timeless Wisdom silver member
    March 30, 2009

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    Awesome! You have a great talent with acrostics! Just one thing to point out, a mistake that I saw in a previous one... "lifes" should be written as "lives". Other than that...bravo!


  • J Macabre
    March 19, 2009

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    People and their fear of those who are different.
    How pathetic can society get.
    They laugh because this person is different,this person should laugh because they are all the same.


  • Ecanuscathetelanael silver member
    March 16, 2009
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    So very true, very powerful and well written. Greatly done, hun.


  • LovelyLauren
    March 16, 2009

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    hmm...Discrimination is immoral...I like it. Very good acrostic. Very well worded, though written in a way that can make the reader stumble at times, but perhaps that's good because I read a few things more than once.
    Thanks so much for entering.

    Lauren


  • starjacket
    March 15, 2009

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    Awesome job for that contest! I eneterd it too! I think that everyone that i know on here did....lol. Awesome job, hon! Best wishes and hope that all is well! Keep up the great work!


  • maralisa silver member
    March 15, 2009
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    a wonderful write good luckin the contestmaralisa


  • Walking Oxymoron gold member
    March 15, 2009

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    Um... this was really hard to read. It was like a sentence that ran on and on and on... it was as bad as Bex in that there were no full stops, so I didn't know where one bit started and another ended. It made it hard to read, and therefore I'm guessing I didn't enjoy it as much as I should have.

    Acrostics rock though, don't they?

    Attention just for you; is that what you want?
    Lol, oh lol.

    The last couple of lines didn't make sense... were there some typos or words misse??

    • DinkyDiver gold member
      March 15, 2009
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      haha the sarcasm tut tut

      have a peek now?? does it make more sense?

      xxx


  • Phallen
    March 15, 2009
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    this is wonderful

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