On the playground summer of '78
I never knew anyone like you
5 years old and met my other half
Big bird was so cool
In study hall spring of '88
I never knew anyone like you
15 years old
Judas Priest and Motley Crue were all we knew
In the chapel autumn of '93
I never knew anyone like you
20 years old
Your new path in life, with me still by your side
In the delivery room in '97
I never knew anyone like you
24 years old
An extension of you to fall in love with
The cemetery winter of 2002
I never knew anyone like you
29 years old
Breast cancer killed the best person I've ever known
A friendship that sculpted my life
My best friend forever
Author notes
Gold trophy in the guy's contest allpoetry.com/Contest/570921
Written February 28th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Your friends......Or Humor! WHAT CHOICES!!! by Mr Chuckles.
300 points, ended April 15, 2004, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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this is so sad yet filled with beauty and a great poem for the memory of your friend, I know she was smiling down on you as you wrote this. just a beautiful heart felt write you have penned here. congrats on your gold.
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Congrats on yet ANOTHER win hon! See, you have more trophies than I do...lol This was so beautiful and so sad...the twisted ending really knocks you off your feet. I'm sure your friend would love this, so simple yet so touching, so strong. Another great job! (Like I would have expected anything less!)
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I think the song you're thinking of is "Don't Take the Girl" by Tim McGraw...fishing when they were 8, robbed at the movies at 18, his wife dying after the birth of child at 23. That song always makes me cry and I see how you can relate the flow to this.
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Congrads on your win
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well done. this is a very imaginative piece. whether it has an element of truth or not is far from me but it is an excellent write either way. well done.
*shadow -
Very nicely told and very sad. I like the reeated line and how it is developed throughout the poem - and, of course, the ending is both surprising and poignant...
Scott
Scott -
Oh how sad. What a terrilbe thing to happen. Very well written and I'm so very sorry for your loss. Good luck to you in the contest.
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wow you should ahve gotten first with this one... it held so much emotion and was just plain amazing... that is all i can really say, amazing... great job
xXn -
this made me want to cry. anything that goes along the passing of years gets me teary eyed--especially when they do not end it total and utter happiness..
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very nice. I love your poem. I love the idea of how you wrote it, going by in the years. Good luck and great job, 5
's on the monkey scale
Mr. Chuckles
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OH wow. this was really good! I didn't know where it was going at first, so that last paragraph was quite a slap in the face. Nicely done! Thanks for entering my contest! Good luck! Keep up the excellent writing! :-)
<3
Alison -
Excellent
OMg your poems was so sad. Reading it sent a shiver through me. It was so moving. Im sorry abut the loss of your friend but Im sure she will be proud of you for writing such a movingand fantastic poem. -
very moving poem. it caught me completely off guard and packed a whallop. such a sad tragedy and I can only imagine the loss. don't really know what else to say about such a personal write except that you wrote it with excellence and heart.
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Wow, that really moved me. That seems to be the consensus from everyone who read it. It is very simple in its style, but complex in its emotion. I'm glad that you can look back and remember all of the good times you had. That's what matters most.
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This is a very poignant piece. I've been pretty fortunate that out of my many years on the planet, I have lost very few people close to me. Folks are still around, almost all of the aunts and uncles etc. are still hail and healthy. Two guys in the Navy were killed while I was in the service (the guy in the bunk below me and a guy one row down... both good people. They died a week apart in seperate incidents. That was kind of spooky.) Then another guy in my department was killed maybe 8 months or so after I left the ship... he would have been two bunks down. This is out of a crew of 300 spread among 15 or so different berthing areas. Anyway, thank you for sharing your story and best of luck in the contest.
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WOW...hold on let me gather my thoughts haha. that was AMAZING. i got the chills lol. it reminded me of a song by tim mcgraw (however you spell that) and i almost cried. that was a very strong poem, packed with emotion. I have old friends, and i can imagine us growing up together. once again, awesome write, im bookmarking it, it made me wanna laugh and cry an dsmile and..yeah u rock -
aww! this was so beautiful and so sad... i am so sorry for your loss... ohh man this was an awesome write...good job...
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wow...this is beautiful....my heart dropped at the end. its so sad. Im very sorry for your loss. this is well put together with a very nice flow. i loved the lines 'Big Bird was so cool'. dont we all remember those days? lol
anyway....this was an awesome write! nice job!
Kim* -
Wow. I love the way you take the reader through the progression of your friendship, the milestones that have cemented you together and ensure your friend will never be forgotten. This was powerful, with a twist in the ending which knocked the breath out of me. You have done your friend proud with such a tribute.
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Oh man! This is so very well put together and told. Perfect rhyme and perfect flow. Just so sad. I really hate that you had to experience such grief. Life can just be so unfair!! (wishing I had a magic wand) It seems like some folks can have nothing but pain while others coast along without a clue! I cannot imagine this not winning. It is pure heart. But still, Good Luck and God Bless. Hugs, Penny -
Wow..this was a powerful piece. I loved the repitivness in each lines, and you just came up with some brilliant things. Beautifully written. Extremly sad..I'm sorry for your loss. I'm still sitting here in awe..this is getting added to my bookmarks, I might just have to print it out. Wow...
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I loved this, actually. I'm surprised because so many of the entries in my contest have been exceptionally weak, and I've been quite disappointed. You showed these snippets of your life together, and I enjoyed the repition of the dates, and the line 'I never knew anyone like you' followed by the age.
I'm sorry you went through the pain of losing your best friend, because I know that mine are often who get me through absolutely everything. Thank you for entering my contest, and the best of luck
~Christy -
oh this is so sweet and sad...i am so sorry for the pain that you went through in losing your best friend. just remember the good times that yall had together...those memories will last a life time. great write...thanks for sharing
-braeden -
aw! Sad! you big jerk! you're not suppose to just leave magnificent poems on your page for poor little chromegirl to click on and read and make her sad
! man, thats such a sob story. I was in a good mood too! well it was b-e-a-utiful! (like from bruce allmighty) haha it sounds better in person. anyways, you are very talanted. it reminds me of my poem called BFF. it is a time line a lot like yours about my best friend since i was 3... but she has completely changed and we have gone our seperate ways. yes another sob story. lol, well i bet you're getting pretty sick of me babbiling on and on and on... okay now i'm just being mean. anyways, it was a fabulous write and it flowed so nicely. you really have a lot of talant so please keep writing!
Peace and Love,
XOXO SammiJo -
ooh this was such a beautiful poem! i loved it!! i loved how you tied in the seasons and everything, so sad but you made it into such a sweet poem! i love it!!
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Wonderful poem, I loved the way you used dates and followed each one with "I never knew anyone like you". And the way it was in past tense for two reasons was not shown until the end was great.
Specking of past tense, can I offer a suggetion on this line,
"Breast cancer killing the best person I've ever known"
maybe use Breast cancer killed the best person I've ever known.
Good luck on the contest.
LadyKat
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This is very good, I really like it...it brings back memories of my childhood, which aren't that far away ..but going back and remembering all my friends from way back when is kind of relaxing...Great job sis, you better win this contest..or else i'm gonna be kicking somebody in the head...lol...
Keep up the AWESOME work!
Love ya
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Grab the tissue box
Loosing a friend is hard...I'm sorry that you had to go through that.
Lovely poem though. Very relateable. Wonderful write I like the flow of it through the repitition.
I really hope you win...you definitely deserve it!
Peace and love and much sympathy
Susan
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This is beautiful. Idon't know what it's like to lose a best friend, but I bet it's hard. Wonderful write.
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