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within a calla lily

 

 

 

 

past pretense, past the verse with its agility
i address a calla lily to you:

let this flower, native
to the earth that carries me,
do all the talking, its whiter words
to flow under your eyes,
dazzlingly
tender

(light up, light up as if you have a choice)

for how else than in the long-stemmed language
of a lily can i translate scars
into song,
the winter soliloquies
of mouths to the softest sounds
of green

(even if you can not hear my voice)

and say that nights
when the love of hands
came between mine,
still pull a slight moan
from my throat,

impossibly
yellow?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

how close can the tongue tilt to tenderness...?

words in italics from “Run” by Leona Lewis
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=n0rjfGvwMdE

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  • tce5
    June 23

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    Hi Nicolette
    I am an amateur macro photographer, I take photo's of flowers and my next project is the Lily. I was wondering if I could use your poetry in my book with your work named. Unfortunately I cant aford anything as I just starting off but I could send a book when finished. Please let me know.
    Tanya
    tanyaevans5@hotmail.co

  • Woah, this was so deeply
    abstract and original.
    One type of write I have
    not yet read. This
    truly amazed me.
    Kept me wanting
    to read more.


  • soulfultia gold member
    April 2

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    Well now...no wonder this won the Gold, you are truly a wonderful poet, your pennings carry incredible depth and really tickle the mind. Love it ~Tia


  • honey bear
    March 30
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    simply stunning


  • natari gold member
    March 24

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    Breathtaking. I especially liked the scars line. You can always capture such pure simplicity and I always enjoy the white in poems. White has so many shades.

    H


  • Emmyb gold member
    March 24

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    congrats on this fantastic write. very clever. very enticing.

    well done indeed!!!

    Emma


  • Dalaney gold member
    March 22

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    this is poetry in its most pure and lovely form - comments simply cannot convey what the reader (me) feels after reading something so beautiful. It's the sigh when the last word is taken...that last long satisfied sigh.

    Love, Lane


  • Draig aine gold member
    March 22
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    congradulation on the gold

    stunning


  • Swan song gold member
    March 22
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    oh my this is a jewel of a poem! Really I cannot say much else It was stunning!!

  • Your words are always so romantic and lovely. Beautiful as always.


  • DolceVito gold member
    March 21

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    So lovely...I adore calla lilies, and yup, they are female(I have a piece called Calla Lilies around here somewhere).

  • Romantic and fittingly inter-seasonal as we cross the borderline from winter into spring. Tenderness in emotion and expression, wish and endeavour to commune thoughts and feelings to another, perfectly in synch with the fragile flower that is the lily.

  • So beautiful

    You defiantly capture so much that most people can not, the certain love that you share is fulfilled within your poems. When I read this poem I almost cried. Thank you so much for inspiring me.


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    March 21

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    You capture something most people can't, including me, just the gentle tenderness that comes from knowing a certain kind of love. I fell for this piece, a few times over. Beautifully crafted. Best to you in this contest

  • Virgoan
    March 20

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    I like how slow-reading feels while i am at the fingers of the world of this piece.

    Beautiful, actually more than beautiful.




    Keep inspiring us my friend with how refined you are in the craft of poetry.





  • sheltered
    March 20

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    makes me want
    of nothing more
    than fire a doob
    and don regalia

    to explore your...


  • IronIcecream
    March 20
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    beautiful


  • LadyElbereth
    March 20

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    So Beautiful

    I read your work with such amazement I cannot begin to tell you the emotions that penetrate my very soul as I partake of your heart. You are every poets dream to be able to so masterfully engage in display what resides from deep within. I have only just joined all poetry this January I must tell you. Your works are among my favourite never will there be a day that I cannot come to your works partake of your artistic beauty well in each composition to feel replete by but a moments expression. My heartfelt thank you for this post wonderfully written work your cadence smooth and oh so lovely, I have partaken in this work with pleasure you have captured so many feelings, so many emotions I thank you for each and every one of them..


    Lady E


  • Sonja
    March 20

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    As always, I am back to your poetry, trying to inhale it and to sigh after your words even I feel how the softness of them can hurt my throat. Great poetry.
    ~Sonja~


  • Jersene gold member
    March 19

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    you write with such a tenderness; a softness that whispers to the soul. Your words float, and I always sigh after reading one of your pieces. This is no exception


  • TheNymph
    March 19

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    stunning poem, incredible imagery and flow. ps; have you heard the original version of 'Run' which is by snow patrol.

  • Son of Jim
    March 18

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    The lily has become somewhat of an icon for you, made by you, it is how we will remember you, most specifically the calla lilly, and personified, for in you it lives and breathes and is us. Translating scars into songs is a great image and metaphor. Then you add in the humanity of the hands, well it is done extraordinarily well. And of course, what would it be with the symbolic nature of the colors? Great write Nic, beautiful poem, thank you for sharing.


  • NurseChilly gold member
    March 18

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    my heart breathes faster when reading your words as i am suddenly aware that i am alive
    this is poignantly beautiful and almost prayer-like

    my love to you Nicky

    run on dear girl... run on

  • grm
    March 18

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    yes...
    genuine and impossibly beautiful

    you truly DO always write from the heart...the happy and the sad...whatever it is that is affecting you

    ja...sometimes it is better to let someone/something else do the all the talking. no?






  • Cannonsfire
    March 17

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    The song lines make your rich words even more poignant, for they are far more than the simple love lyrics Leona sings. Beautiful as always C


  • thepoetssoul
    March 17

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    This is a beautiful piece of poetry you have penned.I would just love to hear how you would read this piece.The whole idea is just magical, wonderful rhythm and flow.
    Thanks for sharing, be blessed in all you do.
    :
    Tony


  • SabaSophiya
    March 17

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    OMG! ThIs is awesome, awesome!! Absolutely splendid!! Gorgeous! Beautiful!! I am glad I came across this. You are such a gifted poet, Nicolette. May God bless you with every happiness in life.

    Best,
    Sophie.


  • flowingwords
    March 16

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    Speechless! There's nothing left to say, everyones already said it! I admire you and your words!
    ~Kimberly~


  • Night Hope gold member
    March 16

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    "(even if you can not hear my voice)"

    Sighhh...Yeahhh, I moaned...thought about weeping, but damn it, I've had about enough of that nonsense. You, my beautiful, Soul~Full Sister...you constantly show Pablo what a klutz he truly was...& me...you fill my eyes with strong songs of tumbleweeds & wildflowers...Love you, Woman... Vlindertjie





  • CaliOkie silver member
    March 16

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    No one can match the beauty of a flower . . . not with a million words. But, you have come very close. Calla lilies; is there any flower more beautiful? This is excellent. Good luck in the contest. As usual, your words reveal your superb gift.

    Garrison


  • Andrew Norris
    March 16
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    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MP5j_Q9CZ3w

    There is another version of this song, maybe the original by Snow Patrol, which is worth listening too. (see link)


  • Andrew Norris
    March 16
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    P.S. You CAN hear that song on youtube, my mistake.

  • Andrew Norris
    March 16

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    This is the second poem I have read today which includes lyrics to songs, and your inclusion suits the poem nicely. I could hear myself humming the tune even as I read it, but I just tried to watch the youtube link and it seems it is not possible to hear the sound, pity. However, this is immaterial when one is thinking of your poem. I really like the use of a colour word in each stanza, the colours seem to make some comment, or can I say 'colour' the stanza. Beautifully written and it reads so spontaneously, effortlessly and simple quite naturally.


  • kaibab silver member
    March 16

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    You are ever elegant fermenting sigh to witness sunset's quivering...how else but an elegant lily could your words ripen in beauty


  • ariazephyrzoe gold member
    March 16

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    oh my I love this so much and that's all I could say

    (even if you can not hear my voice)

    and say that nights
    when the love of hands
    came between mine,
    still pull a slight moan
    from my throat,

    impossibly
    yellow?

    sorry I copied this...cause this is my fave part

  • Rowan gold member
    March 16

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    I love when I see that you've posted something, Nicolette, your language is so beautiful, and pulls
    at my heartstrings. Not too many people can do that, trust me. I love your work, always have.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    March 16

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    You know Nicky, yours is the only poetry
    that my heart simply must, read slowly.

    Always a pleasure dear.


  • le soir
    March 16

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    so many beautiful emotions and thoughts flowing under my eyes now- know that the calla lily is not addressed to me...lol but i can read everything off the poem

    beautiful like you


  • katfair
    March 15

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    I have not been here for a month or so, but ahhh, to come back ...to dip into the lips and folds and unfurling of a calla lily invoked, evoked, by your gorgeousness of words and gesture....
    you are like this flower,
    very much so,
    yr own
    long stemmed language
    of petals

    xoxoxo
    k


  • Allyce May gold member
    March 15

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    Firstly, I absolutely adore that song! Secondly, I must inform you that the original artist was in fact Snow Patrol and the better version if you ask me, as much as I love Leona!

    Yessss, this made me all goose-bumpy, AS USUAL! You own that calla lily that is for sure. It is also my favourite flower So cleanly cut and curved, simple and elegant, much like this poem actually.

    I loved "long-stemmed language of a lily" ; but of course the whole thing is beautiful with an underlying sadness that one could miss if it weren't for the use of "came" and "still".

    As always, you inspire me - you are a wonderful woman


  • leander Moderators member
    March 15

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    There's nothing I could really say that would do even half the justice this poem deserves...

  • dx d by me
    March 15
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    Poetry to make a man tremble...and remember love like this.


  • arafura gold member
    March 15
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    Intense and very sensual. Beautifully expressed poem by a wonderful poet!


  • campanaro silver member
    March 15

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    Lovely

    So eloquently said.
    An incredible poem.
    Thank you for sharing this with us.
    Best
    Love Peace
    camapanaro


  • And Hyetal
    March 15
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    So pretty pretty pretty.


  • marc creamore
    March 15

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    OMG Nicolette . . . you can write the barnacles off even the most stout and grievous heart . . . This is one of your most penetrating and beautiful pieces and that says a lot . . . Simply stunning!!!!

    Marc


  • tara wilson gold member
    March 15

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    letting the flower speak for itself, what beautiful words it sends us....this is gorgeous poetry, Nic!!

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