All that will happen
has happened.
On a mile not seen,
it waits for you
to complete it.
I'm going back to my words,
into my thoughts that
have yet to come,
to move in a direction
without charts or stars
that shines false shadows
upon the night's way.
I will be released among
a silhouette of words and time,
arriving before the puppets,
and the boxers,
in the twilight
of their applause,
as they fight and dance,
win and lose,
live and die,
with their backs
against the wall.
Forming the shape
of things to come,
on a day
and a mile,
that waits for us
to complete it.
Author notes
1: shadow boxing...
2: shadow puppets......
Both preformed against a wall.
A contest entry
- Anything, well... almost anything by still.she.waits.
900 points, ended March 26, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrites for my FAVES only! by perfectsunset.
625 points, ended August 18, 70 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
1 - 54 of 54
-
every thing you do is like a tapestry of emotion and imagery
I love your work liam
bravo
hugs
T
-
Waxing lyrical beautifully as per usual my friend.
-
Wow; I am stunned by the beauty
& natural concepts here...
you provide the reader with such
depth and metaphorical insight.
Your freestyle poems remind
me of some famous poets' works.
This was utterly amazing.
Best of luck & thanks for entering
-
"I'm going back to my words,
into my thoughts that
have yet to come,
to move in a direction
without charts or stars
that shines false shadows
upon the nights way." I love that stanza. It's my favorite.
The whole poem is wonderful and beautifully written.
I very much enjoyed reading this.
Keep up the awesome work.
-
"the twilight of their applause"................wow, that is an incredibly beautiful phrase! Hauntingly beautiful. The only thing I'd correct is, in the third stanza, you need to use the possessive "night's".......you just forgot the apostrophe! Otherwise, this is a very lovely piece!
-
I like the title, Silhouette is one of my favorite words. Usually hard to put it into a structured poem with a meter however. So it fit in well here where it's quite obviously free verse.
-
You are an old soul my friend
I feel honored that you added me as a favorite
-Joyce
-
Great!
I think I'm drawn to your work because the things you write about are often things that I'm consumed with! You have wonderful phrasing.... using deceptive simple wording... because the poem has such depth and insight... yet the meaning is clear and concise. Though, yes, very much poetry it still has a conversational tone to it. Not easy to do.
-
As I read this I am reminded of the shadow puppets as per your notes but I feel something else there.. a kind of sadness but its strange sadness.. is the wall a barrier or is it something else?
-
Well crafted Maistro!
Well worth your efforts! A tale woven beyond compare.
~FAV~Forming the shape
of things to come,
on a day
and a mile,
that waits for us
to complete it.
-
Interesting...
and worthy of that Bronze!
Congrats. You picked a great title for this write & it's filled with imagery & a marv telling of a tale that leaves one with questions & many mental sights & sounds as I've grown to expect in your writes! 
-
i like how you put your words together
-
All is vanity, we have suffered the same fate as others before us and nothing is new under the sun, like the way you ended the poem.
-
Star
Do you feel destiny? Do you think you can change it, or that the shadows already exist and we have to fill them? I enjoyed this.
-
A bit obscure for me
I liked the latter part, and was grateful the AN reminding me.
-
ONLY THE BRONZE?! the midas touch is what this piece has more than anything material of weapons. this is the words of kings! BRAVO
-
I like the inside-out, through the looking glass quality to this poem. Shadow boxing and shadow puppets in the same poem is very creative. Well done.
Mike
-
How wonderful deep and thought provoking...I have lived in both moments and know the shadow cast well...brillant work.
Congrat's on the well deserved trophy.
Love,
-
The prompt is brilliant, and you rose to the challenge, and have a trophy to show for it, though it should have been a Gold!
Shadows of what has past and what is to come, picturesquely through imagery, focusing on your shadow boxers and puppets "forming the shape that is to come on a day and a mile that waits for us to complete it"..What a creative metaphor! Delightful reading...
-
A sincere and beautiful poem. I enjoyed the anticipation of things to come and the mile that still awaits.
-
I had a vision of a huge hand opening to release the "silhouette of words and time...." In my chaotic mind, the image was very cool.... (But you probably have to be in my head to appreciate it.) Anyhow... you have some wonderful phrases here, Liam—"shines false shadows / upon the night's way," a silhouette of words and time," "in the twilight / of their applause," just to name a few. Wonderfully written, and very much deserving of the pretty shiny cup. Congratulations!
-
I do believe this is one of my favourite, favourites of yours.
-
hm i really like it. i couldnt tell you what it ment to me. it brought a lot of thngs to mind. but i couldnt point any out.
but all poems are good, especially if they make you think -
oh the journey we take
just to get there......
it's nice to not have to
make it alone....... -
Oh My
this is lovely.
the opening lines are perfect, true, and prolific.
that fourth stanza spoke volumes to me (as did the whole)!
'as they fight and dance,
win and lose,
live and die,
with their backs
against the wall.'......brilliant and so wise!!
wonderful title as well. i like the thought that we are silhoettes/shadows of life really forming.
-
ooh i like that line...im going back to my words.
ok i just like that stanza.
twilight is another of my favorite words
oh i really like the first line of the last stanza a lot too
-
Simply delicious to read. Rich with metaphor that took my mind on its own little journey without charts or stars. Just lovely Lowell! Pam
-
beautiful words brother.
I like the metaphors here.
-
Well look at you with your shiny little trophy! Congratulations! I'm so proud of you. But I could see why you would place. This is really a pretty poem that just runs right along like the wind. And before I knew you had dumped at the bus stop at the end! LOL I love your poetry. It's always going somewhere and I'm happy to go along for the ride.
-
Memorable
A poem that keeps good company with the reader and urges the reader to remember your name, Lowell Poe! Are you related, by chance, to the Great One?
-
Good description and imagery.
Jake
-
A beautiful read. I felt as if I were sitting at your feet as you were dispensing your wisdom with such generosity...this really had the feel of an intimate conversation. It made me long to know you...
The first two lines not only set the tone for and summed up the message of the poem, they also reminded me of Ecclesiastes..."there is nothing new under the sun." Solomon was a wise man, the wisest who ever lived. You, dearest, are of the same cut, I believe.
It may be the tequila talking, but I wish I could benefit from your wisdom firsthand.
-
PEACE,
BRANDON -
A very universal feel I got to this Liam...I love it...I really do..
"I'm going back to my words,
into my thoughts that
have yet to come,
to move in a direction
without charts or stars
that shines false shadows
upon the nights way."
Were my favorite lines...I can just see it. I really like the ending also..You should get GOLD for this!
-
Your talent continues to amaze me. Best of luck with the contest.
-
Brilliant Liam. This style is exciting, the flow is faast and doesnt stop, ending is none too gentle.
Brilliant. Did I say tht already?
I wish you the best,
Love,
jin
-
This was amazing. Great imagery and very good descriptive words. It was an entertaining read. Good luck in the contest and thank you so much for sharing. Bs
-
this is well done
free verse for me his hard to read, I like rhyme, but this reads poeticly and flows nice I like it alot. Nic
-
As always your poetry is amazing.
Very good write.
I especially like this part
"I will be released among
a silhouette of words and time,
arriving before the puppets,
and the boxers,
in the twilight
of their applause,
as they fight and dance,
win and lose,
live and die,
with their backs
against the wall."
I love it.
again very good write
-
There is nothing new to be found within the human experience. Just differing views of future past. The finality always remaining beyond the event horizon.
To allow oneself to reach into the void and flow wither where we may.
Perhaps when we are truly able to put ourselves at a point where that release can be achieved, we will travel towards completion.
Always saying volumes within the Spartan phrasing.
Excellent,
Peace
-
This is truly lovely big brother ur words are so amazing!!! Wow you did such a magnificent job with this write my words can't express how remarkable this truly is!!!! You did a fantastic outstanding job!!!!! I love how this is written every line is so beautiful!!!!!!! I love u and have missed talking to u. I hope that you are excellent!!!!
-
a very interesting read...you've created some amazing wordplay with this one...In particular I love the 3rd stanza and the thoughts that have yet to come. Exceptional writing.
Rory
-
This is a very good write. The last stanza was my favorite part of the poem. This is a very thought provoking piece. I read it a few times. I also book marked it to read again.
-deadly -
"I will be released among
a silhouette of words and time,"
I love these words. This poem is simply wonderful!
Pam
-
Lowell,
You are a superior human being. Just kidding. But really, you're amazing. This is fantastic!!!! I love the opening. The entire poem is thought-provoking, full of wonderful words that ultimately form something bigger and better. -
Stunning
Youv'e done something here mate...hmm. It's really a shadow of love leaving it's silhouette against the wall. Ya, we're at the wall aren't we. On Tuesday I'll be in the bar downstairs wearin' a green carnation and I'll have pint in my hand. I'll raise it just for you. -c
-
"All that will happen
has happened." wonderful opening. hmm this was a piece that made me think. it was written beautifully and was accompanied by a captivating title. beautiful write! -
Nice imagery and you give us a journey to complete in thought, very very good work.
-
Whew, you write with such amazing depth and talent.
I really don't know what else to say other than amazing poem, poet.
-
Great Silhouette Show.
A wonderful almost musical Silhoutte show.
On a mile not seen,
it waits for you
to complete it.
This seems to be against the natural order, its usually the traveller that doesn't see the mile passed. very clever.
Again repeated here, against the natural order.
I'm going back to my words..
into my thoughts that
have yet to come,
As of course are Silhouettes?
Loved it great write.
-
Absolutely amazing as usual.
Did I pick up on thoughts of the soul travelling through time maybe? A journey guided on intuition alone "without charts or stars". I hope I am barking up the right tree. If not it still stands as an excellent poem, it just means that I fail to understand it. But all writing is open to personal interpretation isn't it?
-
Very intriguing
-
i really enjoyed this piece......
i absolutley love your work, this one is beautiful
great work
your Faerie
-
It was like a dance. Going back and forth and up and down. I love how the motion in this; it's like I can see hand gestures and expressions behind the words. And yet it is somehow concealed to a shadow! These words have a wonderful effect.
Síochán leat
~Mairéad~
Adding your comment:
1 - 54 of 54
