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Moondancer

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Seen troubled trials most my days

Heard eyelids raised, lowered, then closed appraised.

Diaphanous gowns did their poem-smiles

wear.

 

Their singing trains follow trail shadows everywhere

aware,

but even the greatest creator, God,

fell down the stairs with this masterpiece. 

 

Darkness lifts the living to a beautiful death.

Like two empty cups trying to fill each other,

grand, soft environs of reversed effort

resurrects psychological beauty .

 

Paradox of emptiness fills the dead with life. 

Viewing songs of hands, signing keys of praise,

Breaking waves, steeple bells awash in rays,

Deep in dark of drunken day, pay and pay.

 

We had to make someone take notice of

this journey of questions.

 

See us dancing to no rhyme or reason

or answers. 

 

Fallow fall, away to play.

Brightest minds now turned to gray

We are nothing, but came to say

In God's boundless breezes, even trees pray. 

 

Listen quickly

Shout slowly 

Soul sway with open arms of forget

full.

 

Let life fill your dance 

accentuate words like an artists painting faces of their beloved on sacred canvases.

 

Humility is born in the eye of the signer.

Falling autumn bequeaths its kisses on

the vacumn lake of moon

stilly filled with bliss~

and we "am" peaceful. 

 

Forgotten walls of winter camps;

you came for the sunsets,

but stayed for the unraveling sunrise

of the Pastor who killed himself. 

 

Every wearied,

pure smile of pain whose time has come arrives

unhindered by presence.

 

Such is the Ode to the Deaf widow

whose every hug is now a prayer.

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  • "Darkness lifts the living to a beautiful death." I so loved that line. This is really an incredible piece. Who is the artist for this painting. It is utterly magical.

    Nice to read your work again my friend. An amazing poem. ~Pamela

    • Thanks

      Thanks for the applause. Gee, I wish I knew who the artist is. I think I Googled the title I planned for the poem and for it. That's how I find art for my poems, sometimes.

  • Shocked.....

    Timothy,

    I don't know what to say.....I guess a good place to begin is to tell you tears are falling down my cheeks.

    Originally, the line about God falling down the stairs stood out (still does) - such a very unique, vivid, and powerful image. And the masterpiece he was carrying? Quite the mystery, considering all the very fine things He's brought into existence.

    The latter stanza beginning with
    "Forgotton walls of winter camps;"
    Shocked me so that even now, upon the re-read to correctly capture the words, my heart stops. This is why I Love and adore poetry. We are connected by such thin, yet strong bonds, strangers who've never met, and yet.....
    I guess I should explain. My first Love, who left me so connected to the earth, the sky, and so......open - he had some property here in Michigan - a forest where we made our home. There was a project he started with some buddies - a wooden lodge where friends could gather and stay warm in our frigid winters, a hide-a-way. The work didn't really get very far, and never was finished. I, being very young, Loved sunsets as they were very beautiful, and didn't require my rising early to view them. One of my few regrets is that I never did get up and watch a single sunrise with him. Though far from a pastor, he had studied Theology, and died from a particularly nasty, painful cancer. He had liquid morphine on hand for the pain, and I've had my suspicions about the night he passed. The relationship had been rocky, filled with hurt and misunderstanding, and I had finally left and managed to stay away when we found out he was sick. I returned to take care of him.....see how coincidental that was?

    Good God, my dear man, let me step back for a moment and come at it from a less personal space.....and I come again to I don't know what to say. This is poetry, in it's most beautiful, beguiling, spell-binding form.

    So many words and structures in this piece stand out, I do believe it would take forever - and a day - to say.....

    Beyond well done, my dear, dear, dear one.

    Love & Blessings,

    ~ ~ Janet ~ ~

    • Thanks Janet

      I am not online often these days. I'm sorry I missed your responses until now. I remember your poetry touching my chest when I read it a long while back. It seemed you were going through something, so I was unsure what to say. Introverts sometimes have many words, but I don't always. Know what I mean? Thank you again, Janet. Peace Through Love. Timothy


  • Quietgirl17
    March 14

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    Hmmm this is good. The details were very good and really descriptive. I also liked the flow. Anyway great job and keep on writing!!!

    • Thanks, Quiet Girl

      I like your name. I am a quiet guy at heart, but sometimes I can't shut up. LOL! Thanks for the applause! Peace! Timothy

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