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Goodbye little bird

Existence, you were one of our mimes
Joyous, so many mornings woken by song
Exasperated, I told you to shut-up many times
Regret, I never realized, that I was wrong

Astonished, this morning there was eerie quiet
Extinguished, music un-sounding, one so small
Bewildered, yellow feathers aglow like velvet
Pardoning, I never thought of you as a soul

Lifeless, on the bottom of your cage
Greeting, when you crashed down in my house
Presaged, I made sure you had forage
Uninvited, yet you chose us for your home

Pleasure, delight from you cockiness
Music, never outselling your hymn
Burial, for you became airless
Tomorrow, with my sons, feeling grim

Go little bird, find the eagle in you flight
I am sorry; for I caged you for so long
Fly; let your spirit glow alight and bright
Re-establish, your melody heard yearlong

Symphony, your calling for sweet fruit
Longingly, we miss you already, you stupid bird
Sing, your song in brilliantness to outshoot
Rest in peace little one, your melody soars uncaptured

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Not sure if this is what you are looking for.. but it is my "special story" and homage to my little bird Lilian of Tilburg

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  • MarkReeves
    March 24
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    So sad and yes I got to know him. Great write.

  • ea silver member
    March 24

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    Oh, a sad little story you paint here of the caged bird you did not hold so dear. Maybe exuberated should be exasperated? Exuberant means happy.


    • Lilian of Tilburg
      March 24
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      Hi ok get what you mean. THanks for the tip, I changed it Thanks, BTW, I did like the bidry, miss him now still, he did make a lot of noise haha
      Lilian

    • Lilian of Tilburg
      March 24
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      Hi, I did mean Exuberated, refering to the bird.. he was always happy and had songs in abundance...

      Thanks for the comment,

      Lilian

  • Crystal-Marie
    March 16

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    i liked this... i have no constructive critisim because well frankly i dont know. lol but i really loved this is was sad and lamentfull... perfect!!!


  • Denerica
    March 14

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    This is beautiful, for we are more precious than the sparrows so of course would be this bird you described so bright and cheery, I would miss it's song too. Blessings.

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