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Barefoot Angel

 

 

 

I spy a little angel running barefoot in the sun
her wings are gently ruffled by the breeze,
she looks the perfect picture as her day has just begun
her beauty is a sight that’s sure to please.

Like pretty coloured butterflies she flits from bloom to bloom
admiring all that nature has to give,
she longs to pick some flowers that will brighten Mummy’s room
but she knows that in the garden’s where they live.

To see this pretty person radiate her love so bright
is all the colour anyone could need,
running up the garden path, a perfect tiny sight
the smile inside her heart grows like a seed.

In the evening when she’s tired and tucked up in her bed
those tiny angel wings are laid nearby,
childhood dreams and wishes fill her sleepy little head
and with all the other angels she can fly.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • DeJaBlue
    March 15

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    In the evening when she’s tired and tucked up in her bed
    those tiny angel wings are laid nearby,
    childhood dreams and wishes fill her sleepy little head
    and with all the other angels she can fly

    I love that...So beautifully written! Congrats on the silver

    Amy


  • Rose Angel gold member
    March 15

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    S...your rhyme, flow, and meter, plus the innocence of the child you portray is so endearing! I love how you mention"those tiny angel wings laid neargy" So precious...Congratulations on your silver!


  • thepoetssoul
    March 15

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    Beautiful... This is so adorable I just love the way you have written about this little girl.
    You have taken the picture and written something beautiful, Im impressed.
    Thanks for sharing, be blessed in all you do.

    Tony


  • Legend silver member
    March 15

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    Beautiful in its innocence I love that about poems concerning children This reminds me of my own three girls when they were young Everything was magic in the young eyes To soon it is taken from them
    Wonderful


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      March 15

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      Thank you Legend for your comment. The innocence of childhood and the wonders that fill every day ... oh to be a child again ... mmm ... not sure about that one.

      Sue x

      • Legend silver member
        March 15
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        Perhaps not me. But certainly my daughters. Their joy was my pleasure


  • csmmoms2
    March 15
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    Very soft

    And pretty too. No shoes...what next? -c


  • Daizee silver member
    March 14
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    Awwwww

  • Very pretty Sue. Great job. I can remember my girls going out and picking flowers like the girl in the poem wanted to. It is a special age. Simple things like this make the best memories.

    Great job.

    Mike


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      March 15
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      Many thanks Mike for your comment. I think all parents can relate to this picture and I hope my poem ... ahh memories

      Sue x


  • arafura gold member
    March 14
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    Very good! Sweet, gentle and lovely.

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      March 15
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      Many thanks John, as always your comments are most welcome.

      Suzie Q x


  • moonbumps silver member
    March 14

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    Oh to bring back those days of childhood magic and innocence-we really had it good-
    Beautiful poem-flows like honey-
    Hilly xxxx


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      March 15
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      You were innocent?

      Many thanks Hilly, yes, they were the good old days when everything was an adventure and days seemed to last forever.

      Love
      Suz
      xxxx


  • cricketjeff gold member
    March 14

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    gentle and beautiful

    The passion a child can show is wrapped to perfection here

    Great stuff!!!

    Jeff

  • I can really appreciate this poem tonight as I've spent all day out in my garden as spring has sprung and its time to give nature a helping hand. This is a delightful poem bringing back memories of childhood as my mother was a keen gardener and encouraged us from young to appreciate what nature has to offer


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      March 14
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      Thank you Sue for your comment, yes, it finally looks as though Spring is returning to our shores and the picture reminded me of my daughters.
      Sue

  • Wonderfully done, Sue.. A delight for the senses, making me wish I was a kid again! Well done, Hon!


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      March 14
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      Many thanks for your comment. I'm glad you enjoyed it and I think we'd all like to revert back to childhood on carefree days like the one portrayed here.

      Thanks again
      Sue


  • wwfhrocks14
    March 14

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    In the evening when she’s tired and tucked up in her bed
    those tiny angel wings are laid nearby,
    childhood dreams and wishes fill her sleepy little head
    and with all the other angels she can fly." I love this. It's so true. It reminds me of myself when I was younger. Believing that you can be anything you want, and angel, mermaid, princess. It is such a wonderful quality, and sometimes I wish I could go back to those carefree days. beautifully penned.


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      March 14
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      Thank you for your lovely comment. Childhood dreams I think, are the best as their minds aren't cluttered with adult things and they have a beautiful innocence.
      Glad you enjoyed the read.

      Sue

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