Curious eyes close,
sensing unlit motions
of the moon
and the twilight
not seen.
Billow thickening
of willow skies,
the resin of midnight's violin
painting bow and string
like incense lingering
in song.
Two hearts untouched;
and crescent youth
smiled down at the reflection of stars,
the coral lips of innocence
chapped.
Author notes
to be young and in love for the first time. I chose chapped for my title, as in taking off a layer in the innocence of today's youth, how fast young lovers will rush and possibly make horrible mistakes along the way to adulthood.
A contest entry
- what if it all disappears in the shadows that reach for the stars? by etoile.
700 points, ended March 20, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I'm drowning in silence
Comments
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Striking!!!!! you should have won that contest! I will write that person and yell at them!
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this is really fantastic, like in that "I wish I'd thought of it first" sort of way. hell yeah, girl!
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You had great imagery, and your words flowed so well. Great job! Excellent write. Keep it up!
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this had some beautiful imagery in it. i really like that. and i really like your chosen title, that was very creative.
this is a beautiful piece.
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Pretty: the word that best describes this poem. Can be amplified in this case by the modifier: very.
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I love the celestial feel in the last paragraph, just really appeals to me, not sure why.
Overall, loved the post, you never disappoint me when i read your works, always something new, exciting, and very very much worth having read.
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I love this ame... very deep as always. My fav. line
like incense lingering
in song.
I love the way you combined two senses. Very well penned as always!
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