Marie is in the next room
watching Spongebob.
She doesn't know
what Mommy is about to do.
Elastic band around my arm,
veins popped up like popcorn with a
needle in hand.
Penetration, the ultimate relief.
When it's done, I feel complete,
I feel sore.
Marie's knocking on the door,
" One second honey,"
Marie is in the next room
watching Spongebob.
Her sobs can be heard through the wall.
Daddy left today, with no words to say
and my elastic band is tied around my arm.
Mommy wants to go to sleep honey,
Mommy wants to go away,
Mommy wants to die,
Mommy wants to fly,
Mommy can't be Mommy today.
Marie is in the next room
watching Spongebob.
Mommy's in her room in the dark,
curled up in a corner,
trying to be sober today.
Marie is in the next room
watching Spongebob.
Mommy found a way
to meet her needs.
He may be a John,
but the need is so strong.
I'll just close my eyes,
in a short while I'll sigh
the sweetest sigh of
relief.
Marie is in the next room
watching Spongebob.
................................
Mommy's looking off into space.
Author notes
Not an addict, but what do you think of my perspective???????
A contest entry
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800 points, ended March 22, 55 entries
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Hi HeLovesMeNot,
This is the first poem of yours that I have read and I am delighted in doing so, since you paid me a complement of reading and commenting my poetry.
This is an emotionally evocative piece of writing and I applaud you in your understanding of addiction and the addict!! Addiction is one of my specialist areas.
I particularly liked your device of the repeating line:
"Marie is in the next room
watching Spongebob."
I think this a wonderful way of calling the reader to pay attention to what is coming next. That is very clever of you.
A great piece.
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It really puts you in the moment, and it seems really realistic. Wow. That's just about all I can say at the moment, wow.
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Fantastic write. Very "sobering" look at addiction! Thanks for entering my contest! Good luck! I'm honored to have you show your work here!
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If you are an drug addict/alcoholic you can write for this.
that is what the rules state. i am hosting a series of contests for a book i am doing. each contest gives specific things i am looking for. this would fit into some of the other contests but not this one as i am looking for first person writes and from the addicts perspective. sorry but i am removing this from the contest. viyanna rosemarie
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Thanks for reading it anyway, the contest prompt interested me and I thought I'd give it a shot. Besides not being suited for this contest, what did you think of my sober perspective of the addict.
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