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Her Effervescent Charm


Never, in totality of me, can I
describe her; Her charisma, her essence;
Even ever existing beauty in words
and expressions of great poets, fail
to hold her effervescent charm…

Stellar, she stands; against all tides and ticks;
She fights the odds with all her might; Even the 
tragic trying times are futile to dither her smile;
Her adoration, precious than the morning dew;
To be in love and to love; She radiates.

…Living life in pain,
yet she’s blissful when in rain;
Dreading death in grief,
but she nods with her belief;
Holding hourglass in disdain,
She hopes for her suffering to end in vain…

Never, in totality of me, can I
describe how much I owe to her;
May the light shine on her
brighter than ever; And forever;
May the angels be with her; By her side… Always.

Author notes

I use Teal Font for my mom. Support Ovarian CA Awareness!

Written for two very special people;
Mom.
Cassie. Roller. Failroad. Station. That. Albino. Ninja. Duckie.


M.

Why do you build me up, build me up, buttercup baby?

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  • ImperfectBeauty
    December 29, 2009

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    Grief...

    So familiar to my emotional vocab. I love this poem, very beautiful, very touching, very deep and compassionate. Most of all, moving. I would not change this poem. Nor believe anyone should change someone else's poem. Its from the heart and feeling. And that, you did very well. Thank you.


  • sararawrslikeadino
    December 13, 2009

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    very very very good
    its really touching


  • whenloveisntenough
    December 11, 2009
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    i adore this.


  • Peanut Butter.
    October 27, 2009
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    Read this again and I love you.



  • Nineteen
    October 20, 2009
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    Awesome

    "Wonderful" doesn't even begin to describe... I absolutely love it.


  • RAWR-itsPurplePixie
    September 14, 2009
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    This is absolutely stunning.
    I love it.
    This is my favorite that I've read in a while on AP.


  • princes ash
    July 21, 2009
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    very nice written.good job.


  • Angel-of-Chaos
    July 15, 2009

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    This is a beautiful poem, I love the way you capture the beauty of her strengths and weakness'. You write wonderfully, I hope to see some more from you soon


  • AwesomeJoshsome
    July 7, 2009

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    It's a very purty poem, I like that it's dedicated to people and I love the title cause its got the word effervescent in it I love the first 3 lines cause they remind me of how I always feel trying to tell someone why I love them


  • japscot
    June 7, 2009

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    Very beautiful.
    I liked this line:
    "Holding hourglass in disdain,
    She hopes for her suffering to end in vain…"
    Nice job


  • CoCoKnight
    May 9, 2009

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    WOW!

    I have not before read a poem so eloquent!!! It seems to me, to you Love IS more than a concept! But, your secret is safe with me!!! Truly inspiring thou art!
    ~Elron


  • Andi. gold member
    May 7, 2009

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    wow Mayank, this is truly the most beautiful piece I've read in a while
    well done.
    keep 'em up
    ♥ Dani


  • Candyknife
    April 9, 2009

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    hmm...

    very nice, its hard not to smile at this one, there are many people, that choose to be happy people, but everyone handles it differently, its why the world is the way it is, cause of the diverstity in mind, without the misanthropes, and the others with smiles that shine so brightly, there wouldnt be reasons to thuroughly experience all our emotions


  • Creed Trees
    April 3, 2009

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    This was a very sweet poem. Your words speak so beautifully. You're amazing when you write My favorite part of this peice of this peom is listed below. Good job on this poem. I'm sure whoever you wrote this poem for was very satisfied in reading what you wrote!

    …Living life in pain,
    yet she’s blissful when in rain;
    Dreading death in grief,
    but she nods with her belief;
    Holding hourglass in disdain,
    She hopes for her suffering to end in vain…


  • Twitch-E
    April 2, 2009
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    Hah what is with the buttercup reference?? Lolz i love that song! LOL


  • TheDemonEve
    March 29, 2009

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    Very sweet...

    I like how you blurred passion and platonic, maternal love her. This poem is versatile and dynamic. You choose and place your words well, picking the ones with the right connotations, such as "Stellar, she stands." Once again, I like how you use enjambment and caesura. But you might want to keep those two techniques consistent throughout the poem. When you interrupt it, it makes the piece a little bumpy and arduous to read. However, besides that, this poem is a gem. Good execution and very bold, sweet emotion. Bravo!


  • Misanthropic soul
    March 15, 2009
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    I like the expression. i really enjoy reading this poem. Great work mayank.


  • Titus gold member
    March 14, 2009
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    how abou that for devotion, well done, I liked, V. Much


  • Peanut Butter.
    March 13, 2009

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    Mayak, you are such a wonderful friend and so nice and kind to everyone you meet. Even when you're mean you're nice. And I thank you for this with all my heart. You're a wonderful friend.

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