You don't know what its like
waking up every day
feeling like shit
going to bed every night
feeling like shit
every moment of every day
wanting to burst into tears
I know what its like
to want to cry every day
and not even have a reason
so you know you cant
cause what will you say
when they asks whats wrong
when you don't know yourself
so you hold it in
and say to yourself
that you'll get over it
that you did it before
and that you'll do it again
you put on a smile
and walk threw the door
pretend that everything is OK
so why do I cry
you want to know
I wish I could tell you
but I don't even know
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I do know what it's like. I tried to commit suicide by overdose when I was 17. Thankfully, I'm much happier now.
Hang in there. Nice honesty.
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sadly I can relate to this one tears come on for no reason in line 13 it should read when they ask what's wrong other that that it is a great write keep doing well love the rev papa
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When I read the lines, "You don't know what its like
waking up every day, feeling like shit, going to bed every night, feeling like shit" the first thing I thought was, "oh, hell yeah I do!" mainly because I was bullied when I was in school; up until high school, anyways.
You caught a very powerful emotion that most people feel in your poem here, and you hang onto that emotion until the end; I think that's a very important quality to have in a poem like this. You've composed a unique work of art here; I truly hope you are proud of it.
And, thanks for the comment on, "I Ventured Too Far In My Room..."
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I think this poem reflects the feelings of lots of people who will be able to identify with such a struggle. I like your straight forward, matter-of-fact delivery and the emotion really comes through!
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I think this is a really good write.
This piece has so much meaning.
And to be quite honest, I can relate to this so much. And understand how it feels. Theres many times I cry, I sit on my own and cry, i can be at college and cry... but yet sometimes, actually most the time i never really know why im crying.
I can understand this piece so much, and i can also understand how confusing it is for you.
Great write. x
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