She cries in the
dark corner. Tears
falling. Feeling as
If she's not good enough.
Not perfect she cries.
Alone in a crowded
school. She feel so
out of place. Feels like
no one notices her. She
feels so unperfect . People
tell her "You not perfect"
Not perfect. No one is.
no one can be. She thinks.
I'm not prefect. But I am
who I am. I am the best there
is.No one is like me.
It hit me. I'm not perfect.
I'm just fine the way I am.
Look at me and you'll see
that I can be happy with the
way I am.
Author notes
To understand the ending of the poem where it goes from She to me and I. Well that she was me. That's the way I use to be........Maybe still am :S
Reason for this poem is up on the reading list is cus.....A lot of people do feel like this. But God knows we are perfect the way we are cus he made us.
Also forgot to mention that I felt like I wasn't perfect cus of weight issues. But then I did relize I'm fine the way I am because God made me who I am.
Prompt: '...Here I am, as perfect as I'm ever gonna be.'
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Comments
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Very emotional and easy to relate to. The flow is a little odd with all the short sentences, but for the most part it was smooth.
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I can really relate to this especially the beginning. The feeling alone even in a crowded school. The people telling you... making fun of you. All that I totally understand. Good write.
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I like it.
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Wonderful. A beautiful write... This relates to the quote very well. Thank you for entering
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This is inspiring
It is exactly this that I try to tell her. That we love her just the way she is and that way is perfect to us. Thank you for entering.
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I like this. You show that negativity is trying to pull you down. To make your feel bad about yourself, but you stand firm in the truth that you are someone very important. Very nice.
Sam
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I like this. I think it's very relateable and that everyone feels like that at some point in their life. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Good job:
This is very sweet, and is filled with many delicate emotions. I love how it starts off and how it flows. I like how you take your stand and say: No one's perfect.
This is true. No one is perfect, and I like the strong emtions. I can easily relate to them. Great job.
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Thank you for entering my contest. I'm looking forward to the final judging round. Best of luck, Götz
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