When I walked with you
the song of the full moon
was held captive in your kohl.
We put petals of silence
on the mist
and watched our breaths dance
to its quiet music.
The night rushed
to 'dust and fold'
her starlit sky...
a half awake dawn
shovelled away the dark.
We filled the twilight
with
half a song from your harp ,
and
half a poem from my flute;
and
forever...
poured itself
into love's half a moment.
Author notes
Option 1/2
A contest entry
- Pick a Prompt by SandhyaSuri.
695 points, ended March 23, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
inder
Comments
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Amazing
What a wonderful work to immerse oneself in I adored this write my heartfelt thank you for such a tender moment penned to perfection.
Lady E
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Inder, this is beautifully crafted and was a pleasurable read... you've mingled thoughts of twilight, harp and poetry so well... congratulations on winning silver...
mina
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Thank you so much Mina for the encouragement.
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Bravo! You have written well!
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Thank You
I am glad. My delayed response to the prompt had me feeling guilty. Happy Judging.
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This poem is marvellously knitted with fabulous imagery and metaphors. The flow is sublime and it leaves me really wanting to read more.
Thank you for your entry and good luck!
Cheers
Sandy -
this is lovely. i love how you played with the idea of halves and wholeness here. "shovelled away the dark" is such a wonderful line. really loved the heart-music of this piece.
~ Nicolette
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Hi
Please complete the poem within next 12 hours hours - will have to remove from contest - as it has blocked the prompt for others and that hasn't been fair.
Cheers
Sandy -
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Pardon the delay...I hope I did not keep you waiting too long. Wish you have a great contest!
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