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Ecstasy



Little girl come walk this way
I'll show you the way to the
Place that will give you dreams
You'll feel wonderful as I weave
My magic through your veins
Don't be worried when you feel
Those hands ravaging your body
That's how you get what you want

Little girl come walk this way
The world will be yours for the taking
All you have to do is give me your
Sweet innocence and I'll make you mine
Trust me, that pain wont be there forever
Don't be worried when you feel it coming
In and out of you faster and faster, it's
Awkward the very first trying time

Little girl come walk this way
Enjoy a new life of slutty nights and
Date rape dreams as I mesh my life
With yours for a lasting joyride
You'll know I have you for the count
When you take me in your mouth
And enjoy my never ending ecstasy

Author notes

My drug of choice is ecstasy. I've never done it, and never will. But I've had friends do it. I've lost three of my friends from this drug. I hope you enjoy the poem.

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  • Fail-me-not
    August 14

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    Wow

    Amazing to read, how you repeated the line Little girl come walk this way gave me shivers , when you read its like the devil whispering in your ears


  • songstress80
    August 12

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    congrats on the gold, it was definately well deserved!!! i'm just so sorry that you lost three of your friends that way. you did a wonderful job on this poem that you make your friends proud. because of keeping them in your heart and memory and by writing this poem, you not only honor their memory but you also might be able to steer some people away from the drugs. my thoughts and prayers are with you and your friends' memories. i'm very honored to have you as one of my favorites.


  • social suicide
    August 6
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    great!!!

    I love the last line the best. Usually i like ryming poems the best but i really love this one.


  • whitecoffee
    July 16

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    Awesome!!! Congrats on the gold. I loved the last lines of the stanzas, and the flow of it, never tripping up, excellent


  • Jayde1
    June 21

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    wow

    this is an incredable poem.....great lines through out....well done......dark n so true to the pain of this killer of a drug......


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    May 19

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    Powerful words & oh so true...

    Dark, sad & profound in its truth...
    I've lost a few friends myself to ecstacy, never liked the thought of it & would never indulge it...
    A great write that is creepy, informative & incredibly well written...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!

  • Mega Pixels
    May 12

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    SO incredibly creepy in the absolute best way. You did very well in tone and diction, and it flows well.


  • Antebellum
    May 6

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    loved these lines

    Little girl come walk this way
    Enjoy a new life of slutty nights and
    Date rape dreams as I mesh my life
    With yours for a lasting joyride
    You'll know I have you for the count
    When you take me in your mouth
    And enjoy my never ending ecstasy


  • KatherineAnne
    April 22

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    Amazing. I loved your word choice.

    "Little girl come walk this way
    Enjoy a new life of slutty nights and
    Date rape dreams as I mesh my life
    With yours for a lasting joyride
    You'll know I have you for the count
    When you take me in your mouth
    And enjoy my never ending ecstasy"

    I LOVED these lines!
    Truly amazing =)


  • FreeFalling911
    April 22

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    this is really deep and really personal. It helps me get through some of the rough times im going through. thanks for sharing.


  • Blissfullhatred silver member
    April 22
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    this is awesome.


  • ToxicKitty
    April 21
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    this is beautifully written, and i enjoyed reading it


  • glenn shannon silver member
    April 16

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    yes very enjoyable read, extasy , i tried it twice gave me the worst headache and fell asleep to rid the pain not for me im a herb person.


  • Lifes-Broken-Dream
    April 12
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    I love it....it was well written...and i'm sorry for your lose of 3 friends....and thats good that you choose not to use ecstacy...nice work!!!


  • The.poet.of.hearts
    April 8

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    you have killed the girl
    just by the words, wicked work
    pain, suffering.
    you are enough daring to bear the loss of three friends
    and im died in just one friend

    by
    the poet of hearts and beautiful words

  • magnusprime1
    April 8

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    i love it!!! its fantastically written... i have also written a poem about a drug addict... but it does not compare to this

  • sensual
    March 31

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    Wow I can see why this won Gold. You are a fantastic story teller. Excellent work with this poem. Ecstasy is a horrible thing.... well in drugs anyways. Kassie


  • Sgt. Pepper
    March 29

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    this is amazing!
    i can definately relate, and i can see your emotion coming through in your words.
    you have left me speechless, i am definately going to follow your work.
    thank you!
    alex


    • tears.of.silence
      March 29
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      Thank you very much.. It means a lot to have another person read my work and want to follow it.. Thanks


  • nitelite
    March 28

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    omg..wow

    this is so amazing. and breathtaking. i mean one of my best friends died from takin this at a school dance one night. it was horrible watching that. and the way you say this brings bak the memories. wow..its amazin

    • tears.of.silence
      March 29
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      I'm so sorry for the memories. It is never good to bring back old hurtful memories, but I'm glad you found this poem good. Thank you for reading.


      • nitelite
        March 29
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        the memories are helpfull tho becuz they remind me not to take that path


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 27

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    i have never taken ecstasy but know several who have. i really like this write and am happy that you have entered it. i wish you well in this contest. viyanna rosemarie


    • tears.of.silence
      March 27
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      Thank you Vi!!! I appreciate the honor to have written in your contest and thank you for the gold!


  • oldschoolhero gold member
    March 26
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    pretty good


  • punkrocksmidge
    March 25

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    Good job, this is an interesting piece for sure. I like the way you've incorporated such a vast array of addiction attributes into your work. I would suggest perhaps including some punctuation. While you had good thoughts here, they are rather sporadic and tend to mesh together without the help of any punctuation. It's the way you get to tell the reader how you want them to read your poem (where to pause, speed up etc.). It usually helps to read your work aloud when doing this so you know what the reader's experiencing. Anywhooo... good work, and best of luck to you in the contest =)

    Smidge


  • historygeek6190
    March 25
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    very good


  • wipexawayxyourxtear
    March 23

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    Your poetry is unique and I like how you painted a picture with your words. You're a very good writter and I hope you proceed writing poetry, because you are very good at it.


  • heart and soul
    March 22

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    So Sad. You do paint a picture, not one most like to look at, one people hide in the shadows and pretend doesn't exist. Though I have never done a drug in my life part of this touched at some experiences I have had. Terrible how sick the world is.
    I am sorry about your friends, stay strong and keep writing. Always


  • Coloured Skies
    March 21

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    I could build up a picture as I read this. Its very good and I hope you win this contest. You deserve to. Keep writing and let the ink floww.

    Tash.


  • Aelten
    March 18

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    This is such a powerful piece, could be taken in different ways. Sorry to hear of your friends.
    Khia

  • The.poet.of.hearts
    March 17
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    Mesh means?
    It was just okay
    it was containing much imaginary thoughts
    keep writing

    by
    the poet of hearts and beautiful words


  • darkyinsoul
    March 17

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    Wow you have painted a picture and I am sorry you lost your friends within it. This is a exceptional write and I hope your message has been heard.


  • guardianhost gold member
    March 16

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    Excellent write

    This world of drugs has beckoned many,

    the price so heavy to pay. I will be happy the day they are gone! Though I have never had that type of drug - I think I use food to console me. So it is just as bad. I am working on that.

     

    I enjoyed the read - thought provoking -

    All the best in the contest,

    Your Friend,

    Cheryl


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    March 15

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    This is a very well written poem. I enjoyed it alot. I have not done drugs for years. The one that nearly took me was alcohol, the one that was the most fun was mushrooms.

    This poem should be required reading for anyone who thinks that this drug is just a harmless way to have fun.

    Very well done.

    Mike


  • Lanasaur
    March 15

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    I'm so sorry to hear about the 3 friends. This poem is quite scary i enjoyed it a lot!

    Have a nice day!
    Kitty-Kat
    x


  • xxSerendipityxx
    March 14

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    I'm sorry about your 3 friends. This poem is great you put so much emotion into this piece. Best of luck in the contest


  • The Drifter
    March 13
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    NO !


    • tears.of.silence
      March 14
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      no what? wow.. I didn't expect such a response from you. Please tell me more about this No..


  • Skeptikal10
    March 13

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    lost three friends to the illicit substance? i'm sorry, that's horrible, but I really do love this, beautiful piece of work.

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