Eyes like midnight
My breath escapes me
She leans in close
And I'm liquid
chael 09
Author notes
This is like 2 minutes old
A contest entry
- .:TURN ME ON (make me blush):.(get some points) by Minstrel-Morose.
550 points, ended April 4, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Reason your poem wasn't put in the finals: All together this poem was a tease. It would be so much better if it was longer, but i had so many entries...
Good luck in your other contest -
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thanks
But if it were longer it wouldn't be called a moment. Thanks for your time it is appreciated.....chael -
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Sorry.
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no comments till the judge but this was solid
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Oh to be loved like this...
Romantic write.
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short but the best short piece ive ever read!
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I like it. With so little words you seemed to have the ability to add so much meaning to this piece, the skill of a true poet good job keep it up,
-Tranquility
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