There is a ring of children in a garden far away,
They’re holding hands in joy and dancing, rosy is their play.
A lovely girl is there whose body fits her not so well,
But sing she does and crystalline, all hate she will dispel.
Another lass who whispers pain, a precious flirt is she,
Her scars the pattern up her arm, now happy, she is free.
The boys and girls who form the round, all hues and size and choice,
All marked and marred by chilling hearts united raise their voice.
A lonely girl stands at the edge, she longs to join their game,
But paralyzed in fear, her cruel treatment is to blame.
They notice her and stop their play, drop hands to turn and see,
She cringes, covers up her face, and fights the urge to flee.
Encircling her, they calm her fears, acceptance there is found,
For Freedom is this garden’s name, where joy and peace abound.
Author notes
We are all unique, love and tolerance are the answer.
Disrespect my friends, disrespect me. 
A contest entry
- FED UP WITH DISCRIMINATION!!! by LovelyLauren.
37500 points, ended March 17, 65 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very beautiful, I loved the line "All marked and marred by chilling hearts united raise their voice." This poem is very touching and inspiring.
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Thank you!! I appreciate your lovely comment and thanks for visiting
K
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How beautifully done! Only when we, as sisters, join our hands with each other, women will never be respected as they should, let alone the children who need us to unite in love and peace and honor.
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Thank you so much. Actually this is autobiograghical, the people in this are real.
Thanks for your visit and lovely comment
K
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For Freedom is this garden’s name, where joy and peace abound.
so peaceful this line
so stunning in this awesome rhyme
so expressive so much emotion
and honor well deserved
Hugs Angel♥
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Thank you
I enjoyed writing this one.
K
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Beautiful story poem!
I rarely see rhyme done so well and so expressively
The only difficulty I have with the meter is the second half of L5. My mind trips over that part a bit. I think a simple rephrasing of that might produce an unobstructed flow.
Great job!
Paul
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Hmm... I'll definately take a look at that! Thank you for a wonderful comment and your visit!
K
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ooops, I didn't mean "L5" I meant the second part of Stanza 5. sorry.
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Ah, ok
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What a beautiful poem! I absolutely adore this! Very well written!!!
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Thank you so much!!
KW~
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Yes! Love and acceptance to me are the biggies! I love this... Pam
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Thank you, Pam, for reading and a lovely comment!
KW~
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oh my
There is so much emotion and just raw power in this poem! I can feel it in my heart. You could have ended this so many different ways, but you chose the perfect way and the way we are fighting for.
so many hugs to you!
Lauren
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Thank you my lovely!
Hugs to you too!
KW~
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Wow what can I say.. What a wonderful write full of tenderness...I love how you have used the garden in your poem. A place of serenity and freedom.. Love it Love it Love it...Good luck dear poet in the contest...
Love and Light AngelofLight.xx
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Thank you so much my friend, you know how I feel about gardens...
Love ya!
KW~
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Thank you so much!!!
KW~
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Wow...This is amazing and so touching. The ending is so heartfelt. Great job...
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