Standing on the edge of
The Pit
One World Trade Center.
Glass and steel majesty
Has been replaced by
Barren desolation.
Where once was prosperity
Lives unfathomable
Emptiness
Loneliness
Desolation
Standing on the edge
Eerie
Silent
I can almost hear the sounds of ghosts
A silent scream that will never end
Standing on the edge
So many heroes lost
So that many more can live
Wives
Mothers
Sons
Daughters
Cry but be proud
Though the pain will never end
Standing on the edge
I see a child
Hopefully looking for a dad
He still can't believe
Is gone
A mother crying
For a grown son gone much too soon
And a young wife
Trying to make some sense
As she looks desperately for some sign of closure
On this edge
Where the night meets the dawn
Where white doves cry
A contest entry
- Prewrites Contest by tears.of.silence.
1000 points, ended April 18, 407 entries
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Comments
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My granddaughter went to New York to perform at Carnegie Hall and visited Ground Zero. She said it felt sad ... and desolate. We can stand in an empty field and it will be desolate but not give off the same aura. Perhaps because we know the loss that occurred there I have the movie that was made about it, and never watch it. Too much horror and pain.
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very well done. great work indeed. i thank you for putting something like this in my contest. I give you a 20 for this poem. You have a total of 80 points. thank you for entering the contest and the best of luck to you. Kahy
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The emotional content was good and clear, but your subjects and topics are a bit confusing, and threw me a bit. On the one hand, I felt the emptiness and desolation of the WTC tragedy, on the other hand you introduce the image of Lady Liberty, but I can't find the connecting factor between the two.
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I felt the chill run up my spine as I read this. I stood crying the day it happened, as we all did. You bring life into such tragic death. This was my favorite. Good luck in the contest!!
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well if you are not talking about the statue of liberty why the reference to it then in the give me your tired hungry that type of thing?
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hummm I am not at all sure what you are talking about... Maybe the statue of liberty... I think. Still nicely written. Thanks for sharing this with us.
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Awesome
I liked it. It doesn't rhyme but it doesn't need to. The flow and words are perfect. -
Nicely done! I love the beginning, it grasped my attention quite well!
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This is beautifully written.
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