With the first light of dawn appearing at the horizon, I see them run,
My strong, fearless brothers, armed and dangerous,
My brave, mischief sisters, dressed up for temptation.
They all look for shelter,
In their coffin, their grave, crypt or dungeon,
Guided by the moon, I see them flee.
I’m awaken shortly before the sunrise,
Just on time to greet my kind,
Too late for joining their hunt,
I watch them leaving, one by one.
I hope the night was treating them well, hope their hunt was good.
They won’t be back before the last sunlight has set after the horizon.
I’m wandering, and see traces of last nights hunt,
Victims with an open throat,
Bloody spots in dark alleys,
Outrages people, shouting for revenge,
They want the extermination of my kind.
I’m wandering, I’m all alone,
No, not alone, there are more like me,
Some familiar for me, others unknown,
All of them are living among the humans,
Humans who will never know what we are.
I’m wandering, enjoying the sunlight,
Not stepping directly in it,
Just watch it while I stand in the shades.
The time goes by,
Hours of the day seems like minutes,
Minutes seems like seconds,
Time doesn’t mean anything when you’re immortal.
The day goes by,
Soon it’s dark again,
Soon my kind will return,
This night I will not rest,
This night I will join their hunt,
This night I will quench my thirst.
And tomorrow I will mourn with the family of my victim.
Author notes
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Looking for Ap Family only 3 rules 
contest - I could be one of your sisters, not your twin sister, I have allready one.
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Comments
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This felt like something someone could have been saying in a play. I imagine the one saying all this walking and talking in eerie fog. Great horror and flow in your words.
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I love the way you have written this its beautiful, i dont know if your writting about Vampires or Warewolfs but i read it as Warewolfs, and it was brillaint
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Ahhh them vamps. Something so intriguing about them isn't there? Wonderful write and thank you for entering my contest
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Good
Very easy to read. Good story line. Good ending. Thank you and good luck -
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I like this -
Nor my thing at all. Way too many cliches.
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Love vampires myself I find them very fasinating and tragic. I lean more toward the Anne Rice vision of vamps. I think you captured that.
The Positives:
Fasinating and addictive I loved the way you discribed the tragic guilt of a monster
Room For Improvement:
Nothing I can see you did wonderful
My Favorite Part:
The day goes by,
Soon it’s dark again,
Soon my kind will return,
This night I will not rest,
This night I will join their hunt,
This night I will quench my thirst.
And tomorrow I will mourn with the family of my victim.
Loved the ending so great
Overall:
I give this an 8/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.
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This is a very well written piece. The image and description were well done. Though I think it lacks the dark touch that would make this a truly interesting and fitting piece.
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This is really good. I like the creature of the night them.
Vampires, and dark wraiths have always interested me.
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Wow, I can't believe how many contests you have this entered into. I was intruiged although not really into the fantasy type of write I enjoyed this anways. Well done. Best to you in the contest
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This is a dark piece penned with great imagery. The end of the poem drives into the heart what it would be like to be a child of the night. Thank you very much for the entry!
Az
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0h boy do I love the dark writes, you have done an amazing job here
Thankyou for your entry
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Loved it =)
"The day goes by,
Soon it’s dark again,
Soon my kind will return,
This night I will not rest,
This night I will join their hunt,
This night I will quench my thirst.
And tomorrow I will mourn with the family of my victim."
That part was fucking Awesome
Great Write and
Thank You for entering
Good Luck
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i liked this piece for the fact you didnt add much gore for the topic you brought up and how well you did describing a topic im almost certain is fiction in your life
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WOW. very good. I like it. Thanks for entering it and good luck
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Good dark write. Keep it up.
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I really like the way all your thoughts are incorporated into the poem all along with everything else that are going on. it seems to go off on many tangents which i like. good job and good luck in the contest!
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Liked the mysterious, eerie feel to this piece...nicely done
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I Am Sorry....
I am sorry, contest. So I have to remove it, however, the fault is mine. You are welcomed to enter a new poem. -
Thank you for the link to the other poem. =}
This is very well penned, I feel such emotion.
The ending is perfect, it ties everything together so well. I really do mean that.
"And tomorrow I will mourn with the family of my victim."
Thanks a bunch for entering my contest.
Kitten
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