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Storm

Thunder shakes my frame
Rain pelts down cleansing the earth
Lightning splits the sky.

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This is one of a few haiku I wrote for my Creative Writing class a while back. I just came across it and thought I'd stick it up.

Please, constructive criticism is much welcomed!

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  • astrologicalzodiac
    March 12
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    Loved it!


  • DesolatELifE
    March 12
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    'lightning splits the sky' - great.

    I love lightning. Exciting, and reminds me of excitement with my brother and I, a long time ago.

    'Rain cleansing the earth' - too right. I love rain, as well.

    'Thunder shakes my frame' - and mine, too. In a good way. Usually because I bounce around in that mentioned excitement when I hear it.

  • kdom
    March 12
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    Like it (I like anything about storms!)


  • Amandainlove
    March 12
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    I love short little bursts of poetry like this


  • hisaddiction
    March 12
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    nice..

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