There is a recurring dream I have,
of the content I'm unsure,
there is you and I, of that I know.
I know each time I awaken
it is to a desperate sense of loneliness
and a need to crawl back into the cocoon I've made,
hoping the warmth will make heavy my eyes
and send me back.
Send me back to a place I know not
but one where, of a surety, I must thrive,
for there is you and I and paradise found.
Of that I am sure.
I am sure I would spend eternity in my head,
where fiction plays out the life I ache for,
if not for the hope that abides still
in the essence of who I am.
One day you will know.
One day you will see.
One day.
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No thanks. It is very powerful though.
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damn... i hate that. it's an almost nightly thing for me. i hate it, yet i feel like i can't live without it (Bittersweet Nights indeed). i wake up, curl intomy little ball, and try to squeeze memories and thoughts out of my mind, only to sleep restlessly and wake up feeling lonely and cold, knowing he's not there next to me. good job.
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mmmmm. . .
I wasn't expecting something as unusually beautiful as this, and I'm afraid I am surprised into speechlessness. . .
There's something about this write of yours that I can't quite fathom. . .on one side I think I understand exactly what you mean, and on the other I don't get it at all. . .but - good work, poet, and keep writing. . . 
♠ Lady Elinor
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this is beautiful! I love the way you talk about not really knowing what the dream is about, but knowing that is something that you want.
"I am sure I would spend eternity in my head,
where fiction plays out the life I ache for,
if not for the hope that abides still
in the essence of who I am."
This is very well written!! My favorite part. Excellent job!!
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it sounds to me like you are wanting something from this person, who either knows or doesn't (i think they don't) that you need them. i think the cocoon you have built around yourself is what is keeping them out of your life. this is a great write. i think you could go further with what the dream means to you, but other than that, it was a great write!
keep writing!
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