The invisible scars you’ve caused, you’ve caused this pain.
Unable to see the pain, the pain deep inside of her.
So much fear yet you still go on, go on and on.
So much emotional drama, drama you’ve caused.
Keeping her up at night, up with nightmares of you.
Never caring how much she’s hurt, hurt because of you.
Now the never-ending reminder of what happened, happened with you.
She’s stuck in this wormhole, a deep hole of pain.
The invisible scars you’ve caused, always here to stay.
Author notes
Damn it, I did it again the last to lines rymne grrrr
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truthfuly is this anygood?
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This is very good, I can feel the pain. I can relate to this write, to a degree. I am sure the situation is probably a little different, but I can feel the emotion in this write. Very well done.
Thank you for entering my contest.
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I like the repetition-ish business in each line. I like that quite a lot. This is a painful poem, obviously. Red font on black background suits it well. Irrelevant, I'd say, but nice.
Only thing I dislike is that capital 'h' in the second happened in the third line from the bottom. Of course, that's just visual, which doesn't make the poem any less good.
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Thank you for the long and informational comment i will fix the h, I like the repetition to, wasnt sure what i was doing but it kinda worked out, Thank you and keep writting.
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I didn't notice this was by you! I've been reading lots today, because I am bored in this shop =]
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- looks at self- Haha yup its by me lol, I am sorry your bored.
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I like it a lot. And the rhyming works fine.
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I know but its suppose to be freeverse I cant free verse lol.
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