Away
I
go...
Leaving my herd...
Carried by the hand of god,
Ushered into taking a dip in the cup of life.
Icy cold
White as snow
The waters in the cup r i p p l e
Gently as my hooves touch the surface.
I feel important,
My head growing bigger
As it soaks up knowledge.
But I now realize...
That like those little snacks that smile back
(Until you bite their heads off),
And that round, black and white, family
Whose children are all named "oreo",
I am merely sustenance
For a bigger world...
Please don't eat me...
Author notes
It's all metophrical and stuffs for being about a snack. Lolz
I always felt sorry for them tho, cuz they look like weird little animals. XD
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the spacing didn't work for me in this case. other than that, you had some spots with strong content...thanks for entering.
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That was fantastic! Simple, but with so much behind it. The last line made me smile, because it added a somewhat child-like aspect to the poem. The whole piece has the interesting twist of being the snack that doesn't realize what's going on just yet, which makes for a very entertaining and enjoyable read.
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