Imagine.
a red sea filled with love and hate,
a tulip scorched with something new,
a baby born before its date,
real magic entangled like voodoo,
Imagine.
dark sun that crys to sleep,
awaking to the shining moon,
folding waves that never leap,
a mixtape of a brand new tune,
Imagine.
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I'm not a hundred-percent of the message you're trying to convey here, but whatever it is, I love your imagery! You've used some fascinating visuals to pull the reader into your world headfirst
Just a tip: Always be attentive to your grammar. Separate your thoughts with a comma, and end each idea with a period, otherwise, your verse will read like a giant run-on sentence. Oh, and 'crys' should be 'cries'... If you're ever unsure of spelling, please ask me; I'm always willing to help
Keep up the good work!
Laura
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