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long shadows

I touched the face of the sun
emboldened, then lay down
next to the moon, and let the gentle sands
bathe over me,

in their soft silver light
I felt a song in the silent beams

so pleasing, my mind paused there
to hold the lingering darkness
and made dawn wait behind a storm

the seas have a cousin in the clouds
they watch each other grow, and flow
between the same earth and blackness beyond
a sign of nature, things forever strong.

They lend courage to the bold
those who stand on tops of mountains
feel lightning flash and welcome thunder;

for there is nothing to fear in the world we have made
except our long and hungry shadows.




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  • bachelorette silver member
    March 17

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    I'm sure what else to say beyond, I love it. I will go off on a tangent:
    I have this friend who took a four month long road trip/mountain biking trip a couple of years back. This makes me think of him during that time and the pictures he sent me. He was meant to be out finding God, but all he found was the beauty of this world and a lot of poems from me.
    This poem makes me want to take my own road trip. Nature is absolutely awing (and poor us, we just love to gobble it up or turn it into a tourist attraction). The last two lines are rather haunting. I better hurry up and see what there is to see before it's all gone.
    -K


  • deercatcher
    March 17

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    I can't read too much of you
    Or I will give up...

    Ever read beowulf? How about the spoof, Grendel? The G monsta laughs at a tree split by lightning. There was a flash in the back yard; I parroted Grendels mock, "I'm not Impressed!" The smash of thunder drove me to my knees, hollering "I'm impressed!" The tree was a block away at my sisters. Broke a window. Oh. and "I'm impressed."


  • fluffatron69
    March 15

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    I rather like that!!
    No restrictions of rhyme, just flowing words that give me stark images and pretty moving thoughts!! Good stuff!


  • Ms-Mouse
    March 15
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    That says it all, 'tis only we - we have to fear.


  • Rose Angel gold member
    March 12

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    Oooh, awed from beginning to end...Your imagery keeps flowing from one to another in the basking in nature's beauty you mention...So refreshingly magnificent a write.. penning!

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