Try to see the whole picture where does it stem,
Embraced through violence past on by a whim.
Refusal to see the whole picture breeds hate,
Recognise the world in each of our mistakes.
On every action a reaction is born,
Rising out of humanity breeds such scorn.
In every house hold rises destruction and fame,
Sure we all blame others yet we all play the game.
Most are blind today for look at our own gangs.
System of neglect is the rider of today,
Time stands still while the world becomes displaced.
Entering into a downfall spiraling out of control,
Memories we speak of, of the days of old.
Slain by our hands as we let our world grow cold.
For we are all to blame for we have ignored our children today,
Ravaging the cities and the towns with bullets from gangs sprayed.
On every newspaper tells of our terrorists, deaths of innocents today,
Mothers crying yet where were they on that fateful day.
Yes our world is so tarnished from neglect from you and I,
On every street-corner today the drugs they buy.
Uncontrolled they strip away love,
And please tell me when will this country say that's enough.
Never ever feel you are innocent if you did nothing to stop it today,
Did you think on its own, it was going to fade away?
I don't think so, for it is an addiction a world in decay.
Author notes
How you ask well first you start in our own homes .Know what your children are up to and who their friends are .If they are minors then be home for them and see they are in at a early hour . Watch who comes and goes from your home and stop the drugs . If we dont get our humanity under control then look about at the countries around us as ask yourself which one would you chose by doing nothing to stop the violence today . For Terrorism is nothing but a small gang that has grown like a virus and it's becoming an epidemic in our country .
A contest entry
- "TERRORISM" by rinzurajan.
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agreed...but it's not just the neglect from parents...in many countries,poverty is so prevalant that the parents can't keep a watch on their children...and to add to that no education and unemployement...
the youngsters have no other way out and they fall prey to people who pose as their saviours...they allure theri families by giving them financial assitance and thus a terrorist is born...out of poverty,uneployment and lack of education...
i loved the conecpt of ur poem..
good luck
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A great piece to tell the dangers of terorism. Being alert and keeping our kides safe and close will help but they will always hate us. Those that think if we just leave them alone they will stop have not looked at history. They want us destroyed and if we would get passive and let them walk in it would be better for them. Staying alert and ready is how we fight it and not getting apahtetic.
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Spend More At Home
And I'm refering to the powers that be in Washington - the waste of lives and money would be better spent fighting terrorism at home instead of fighting in Iraq - Afghanistan - Vietnam etc. how would I change this poem? put the blame where it belongs - "righteousness exalts a people (nation) but sin is a reproach to any nation" as long as our leaders sin we will too - Bless God - Joe -
Terrorism Is Spawned By The Commander In Chief
As long as the Whitehouse thinks that righteousness comes out of the barrel of a gun - the underlings will think likewise - and act it out as well - - Bless God - Joe ---------------------- peace
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Your author notes; 'Know what your children are up to and who their friends are'
Easy to advise, but not so hard to achieve. I think it would be better to advise 'Know your children', so that, in most cases, you don't need to know who their friends are, because they're worth trusting, in a good way.
And 'Watch who comes and goes from your home and stop the drugs' - sounds like you've already decided that 'the drugs' are a problem, where, in many places, they don't even exist.
That's not about the poem, though.
I like the intention of the poem. It's a nice ambition.
The last line doesn't make sense to me at the moment. Either needs a little more punctuation or another word.
I agree with you that humans are to blame for allowing terrorism to exist this way for so long, but I don't think anyone can help now. I'm more likely to say yes to the question in the second last line.
Great poem. Well done.
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In 2007 on the Jewish New Year a Palestinian gunman burst into a Jewish home killing two people. One of the dead was a 7 month old girl.
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beautiful
i love to see people writing about things that really matter, and i love this poem for that and its clear view of the underlying issues that our world is really missing at the moment i think. well done
loved it.
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A world of decay
My how sadly true. Greed and the Me, Me, Me concept. & blinded by such desires we seek our owm demise. Powerful and honest piece dear poet.
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line 18 should be "fateful" and line 21 "uncontrolled" with 2 l's. besides tht this is very insightful and i agree the world is a mess.
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You sadly have hit the nail on the head violence hatred and suspicion lurk in every corner of our so called enightened minds but now the river flow is strong too strong for the individual its need a massive shift and the press who are half responsible for what is occuring today especially the ignorance towards that which many of us dont understand, need to get off their asses and inform more intelligently not for a sensational negative story but for the sake of humanity or what there is left of it ... a wonderful thinking poem poet ..so so true
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i love this, simply amazing, i don't even know what to say, but great job. did find one thing that threw me off though- Did you think on its on, it was going to fade away? you forgot the w in own, other than that, AMAZING
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a wonderful write so full of depth and honesty throughout good luck in the contest my friend take care
maralisa
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