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ADHD (Avidly Demented, Happily Deranged)

There are words on the tiles
cracked, rotten, disinegrating
turning into night
dimming a perfectly good sunset

lets drain the ocean
(for fear of flood)

looking towards the horizon
whistling success
packed in a can of sardines.

lets build a better boat
(in case of flood)

for all of my friends that aren't dying
are already dead
I'm jumping out the window
and forgetting that there is a ground.

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I'm considering this in heavy need of revision
wrote it for a contest, and then when I came back i couldn't find it
would love some advice.

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