the loner boy
something about the him amuses me
his beauty radiates
no other boys will give him a chance
his beauty mocks them
makes them look like fools
do i dare utter a word from my clumsy mouth
or let him sit alone sadness showing through his
sparkling blue eyes
should i dare move my heavy feet
for i know ill trip and fall right in his presence
he stares blankly
at me with pleading
eyes consuming me
as a whole
our gaze becomes
a hopeful bond
and when i finally
gain enough
courage he's
gone
like the sweeping
sweet breeze of a spring
day
short yet so sweet
A contest entry
- Titles & Topics!!! plus anything goes. by purplemoon.
953 points, ended May 29, 91 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
im 13 so dont go crazy but what do you think i would really like feedback
Comments
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Finally Someoen My own age. I know exatly how you feel. I made the wrong choice about a boy I knew I blew him off becuse I though he was "gay" not homosexual. and Now i regret it deeply.
Thanks for the wonderful entry.
Kathryn
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Welcome to Allpoetry
For a 13-year-old, you've written this with maturity and poise beyond those years. This is beautiful, and your descriptions of this person reminded me of someone I know very well
Just a tip: I suggest breaking this into verses of even length. Visually, it's easier to focus on each unique piece to the puzzle. In all,though, your poem is just as lovely as the boy it was written for
Keep up the good work!
Laura
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