You walk inside the big colorful tent
Hopeing to have fun all day
Yet as you enter the smell of rot fills the air
You gasp as you look about
A clown comes near with rotting flesh
decaying limbs stren across the floor
"AHHHHH" you wail
step backwards when you bump into something
A little girl in piggytails
Stragilry hair all strewn about
clothes in tatters
"Will you play with me" she askes
You just walk away
blod dripping form the celeing
Every were you turn there someone
no not someone, something
Monsters, creaturs, hedious bests
I try to leave, all the exists are blocked
Im traped i know it, theres no leaving now
The last thing i herd was faint carnival music playing softly in the back round.
A contest entry
- My 1st contest -DARK CARNIVAL! Enjoy it. by Catacomb.
560 points, ended March 21, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think
Comments
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ummm wow i really messed up i did the whole poem in you, until the very last, i started sayin I. Rele weird SRY to those of you who r reading it!
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I think some punctuation marks would make this write even better and double check some spelling and also capitalize the I's that you have in lower case in the last sections.
Otherwise good job and good luck in the contest. -
There are a lot of spelling errors, though I will not take it into account this time - since it's my 1st contest. You used good imagery, though the end lacks something. Thank you for entering.
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