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A Moment

Hanging by a moment
to the the things that keep me here
Hanging by a moment
to the things that will someday disappear...
Hanging by a moment
to the people and this place
Hanging by a moment
to this body and this face.
Sooner than later
Mother Earth will change her gown
Spring will defeat winter
Then summer comes around.
Soon after the leaves will change
and Autumn shall prevail
Nothing ever stays the same
yet nothing ever fails...
Hanging by a moment
because thats really all we know
Living in this moment
because someday we all will go.


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  • Tqop
    April 30
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    A delightful read.


  • rose1
    April 30
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    Beautiful

    keep writing and keep your head up!!


  • The.poet.of.hearts
    April 7

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    should be a gold winner
    see, you have got your level at poetry
    you are becoming a big poet
    better than me
    how are you?
    Crazy boy miss you alot

    by
    the poet of hearts and beautiful words


  • Magnetic Storm
    April 1

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    Good write! "Mother earth will change her gown"- thats a good line!
    I would take ' will someday' out of the 4th line, I would also change the line 'Soon after the leaves will change' to 'soon the leaves will change' , last I would take 'will' out of the last line.

    Notice I said 'i would' do that. I think It would flow even better with those changes.

    Just my opinion. I liked it either way.

    Thumbs Up.


  • k.a.s.s.i.e
    March 26
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    woooow!!!
    loss for words... ahem...

    there.

    kAsSiE


  • Aelten
    March 23

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    This is really nice. Well organized, I like how you brought in the seasons, one of my favorite subjects.
    Lliving in this moment
    because someday we all will go." This is a great ending, tying it together.
    Best wishes-
    Khia


  • ashley-dani
    March 23
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    Wow this poem is really awesome. I could totally turn this into a song.


  • individuality gold member
    March 19

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    i like the repetition used, it adds to the poem’s strength I feel. and the pace is a slow steady one with a soft serious tone flowing along, aye time moves on and we inside her colours move too, we are here for a short time, so we must hang on to all that is offered whilst here. a good poem.


  • Lonely
    March 18

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    Lovely poem, the rhyming scheme and flow is really good too, each one of us is hanging by a moment! Excellent piece of poetry thank you for entering the contest

    Peace,
    Lonely

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